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Submission Information:
Series: Rhythm Heaven
Game: Rhythm Heaven Megamix
Console: Nintendo 3DS
Title: First Contact
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: ThatHiddenCharacter

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[ThatHiddenCharacter]

[Latios212]

Looks pretty good. Bunch of small things:

- The first measure sounds unusually empty. Try filling out the Am chord a bit more to reflect the original better.
- m. 2 beat 3 dyads should be C-F not D-f (F chord)
- Is there a reason you have the melod in m. 19+/25+ an octave lower and the chord in m. 21+ an octave higher than in the original?
- I suggest slurring your grace notes to the next melody note in m. 21 and 28
- m. 21 beat 4.5 LH should be a rest
- m. 22 beat 4 LH sounds like A-G-E-B instead of what you have written?
- Melody in beat 24 - I think the A on beat 2 should be two 16th notes instead of one eighth note, and conversely I think the E on beat 3 should only be one eighth note instead of two sixteenths.
- The mordent in m. 27/31 should be flattened (i.e. to indicate D-Eb-D instead of D-E-D). Feel free to ask if you need help getting that symbol.
- m. 36 LH - B should be flat and C# should be natural
- Small suggestion - 4 systems on page 1 and 5 on page 2 to use the space more effectively. Right now there's a disproportionately small amount of space around the footer and page 2 header (something I suggest you check for all your sheets - been seeing similar potential improvements across other recent submissions too).

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

Files have been updated.

Also, in m24 beat 2.5 (and so on), I hear two E's play there distinctly (as does E. Gadd), but Latios does not. I was hoping that another Updater could provide some input there as well. It's at about 0:52 in the video.

[Latios212]

Cool. I approve given that whoever checks this next verifies this:

Also, in m24 beat 2.5 (and so on), I hear two E's play there distinctly (as does E. Gadd), but Latios does not. I was hoping that another Updater could provide some input there as well. It's at about 0:52 in the video.

(Also think the music on page 2 could be moved down away from the header a bit more since there's ample space at the bottom, but I won't hold up the submission over it)

[Libera]

A few things:

-I agree with Latios on bar 24.  I don't hear the E on beat 3.25.
-The forte in bar 1 could be better lined up with the notes.
-I also agree that you could spread things out a bit more on page 2 since you've got a lot more space at the bottom then you do at the top.
-There are more harmonies that you include pretty much everywhere, but if you've left them out to make the right hand easier to play then that's fair enough.  Though I would at least beef the final bar up to being a full A minor chord, like you did for the start.
-I'm not sure the crescendo marking in bar 34 is really worth much as it basically only applies to the glissando in the left hand.  I'd just leave it out, personally.

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

Alright, I've updated the files.

[InsigTurtle]

More feedback time!
- You could still add more meticulous articulation notation by adding slurs to show which notes are joined vs which are detached.
- m.18 hearing a F# dim as the 2nd chord, not the split 3rd it is right now
- m.21-22 not at all hearing what you've written in the jazz organ. Sort of sounds like a Dmadd9->Em7? I'll check on that once I refresh my brain unless someone else wants to chime in

[Latios212]

*poke*

Messaged Libera a little while back and he suggested something more like this for 21-22:

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

Files have been updated.

[Latios212]

- You could still add more meticulous articulation notation by adding slurs to show which notes are joined vs which are detached.

Did you give this any thought?

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

Did you give this any thought?

I did give it thought, but I don't find it to really be necessary.

[Static]

I think the current articulations are fine. Slurs just make things extra obvious, but its not really necessary especially when the only markings here are staccatos. I think it's pretty easily understandable on a first read.

The only thing I would change is the Ebs in the LH of m29 and 33 - they should be D#s. You can't tell just from looking at the sheet, but the extra harmonies in the song indicate a B7/D# chord here.

[Latios212]

The only thing I would change is the Ebs in the LH of m29 and 33 - they should be D#s. You can't tell just from looking at the sheet, but the extra harmonies in the song indicate a B7/D# chord here.

Got this for ya. Time to accept!

[Zeta]

This submission has been accepted by Latios212.

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