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Author Topic: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared  (Read 330 times)

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[SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« on: September 20, 2019, 07:58:40 AM »

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Series: Super Mario
Game: Yoshi's Crafted World
Console: Nintendo Switch
Title: Main Theme
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: FiveNineSquared
« Last Edit: October 29, 2019, 04:47:12 PM by FiveNineSquared »
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #1 on: September 20, 2019, 08:04:34 AM »


I've had this lying around for ages...
Stuff that's bad:
- m6/m14/m23, beat 3: the last two 1/4 notes in the group should be small as well (see below)

- Copyright text overlaps stuff

(hold on, i'm going to reupload the file with measure numbers and header text, i forgot)
EDIT: fixed
« Last Edit: September 20, 2019, 08:14:39 AM by FiveNineSquared »
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #2 on: September 22, 2019, 05:43:13 AM »

if you're gonna add them tiny notes, i'd still add a Db dotted half note in places like m.6 just to clarify the direction of the flute line.

There's really no need to add a staccato to a dotted quarter like in m.8 and so forth, a dotted quarter would show the same information with less clutter

Did a preliminary check and most things seem goo,d

M.21 's Gb in bass should be F#
for m.27 and likewise, you could preserve the linear motion in LH by using an Fb there instead of an E
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #3 on: September 25, 2019, 12:15:06 AM »

I can help with the formatting once the above stuff is resolved.

Quick question though, is there a reason you wrote this in 12/8 instead of swing?
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #4 on: September 25, 2019, 12:16:06 AM »

Just popping in to say I very much agree that swing would be more appropriate and readable than 12/8.

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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #5 on: September 26, 2019, 03:49:59 PM »

I think the reason why I wrote this in 12/8 was because of some of it using triplets (eg, m8, m20 beat 4) but in retrospect those two occurrences don't really warrant 12/8. Redoing this one!
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #6 on: October 15, 2019, 12:37:09 AM »

*poke* how's it going
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #7 on: October 21, 2019, 03:58:51 PM »

Whoops. I'm back and changed everything to 4/4 (and tweaked what Insig pointed out) - sorry it took so long. The swing didn't transition over from the xml.
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #8 on: October 21, 2019, 11:54:10 PM »

No worries :) I can handle the formatting and swing marking in Finale for you.

Before that though, some passing comments as I'm looking at it:
- Try and condense the tempo marking and performance direction at the beginning a bit
- Should be in F major
- You've got ample space on page 2. Dunno if this is something you can do, but give the music a bit more room to breathe by using 4 measures per system and only putting 4 systems on page 1.
- Include the developer (Good-Feel) in the copyright info
- Rhythm grouping is incorrect in the last measure
- Make sure your rests are placed correctly when using multiple layers
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #9 on: October 29, 2019, 04:47:14 PM »

So, unfortunately, I'm unable to shift the tempo markings around without moving which notes they anchor to (so I left it like that) but I've fixed:
+ the key sig from Cmaj --> Fmaj
+ the spread of the staves across the two pages
+ developer info
+ last measure's wrong rhythm grouping
+ the overlapping rests

(edit: also there's a problem involving the second voice in m6, m14, etc. having a (probably) redundant flat that I can't remove without changing the pitch)
« Last Edit: October 29, 2019, 04:49:50 PM by FiveNineSquared »
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #10 on: November 17, 2019, 07:40:14 PM »

Okay, sorry for the wait... I went through the first half of it at least. Did the Finale formatting and stuff.

Things I changed aside from miscellaneous visual stuff:
- m. 5/13 beat 1.5 LH is D-F instead of D-A
- Hearing beat 1 LH of m. 8 as G-Bb-D
- m. 12 is missing a bass C# on beat 4

Here's the file: https://www.dropbox.com/s/djaqh6a0hw0z78g/Yoshi%27s%20Crafted%20World%20-%20Main%20Theme%20edited.mus?dl=1. Let me know if anything's off!

Question before I finish up checking the rest of it: I'm not sure I exactly follow the harmonies below the melody in the m. 18-21 section. Regardless, this is one of those places where we should definitely use two layers due to having countermelodies as well. Thoughts?
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Re: [SWITCH] Yoshi's Crafted World - "Main Theme" by FiveNineSquared
« Reply #11 on: December 03, 2019, 12:59:53 PM »

So I listened through the piece again and I think we can remove a few things from m18, and shift the countermelody to a second voice like you said:


(this is done in musescore)

might be a problem at m20 where the last note of the second voice should align with the last note of the first voice, so an alternative would be this:


when you check the rest of the score you can add this in, if you don't mind :D
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