[MUL] Freddy Pharkas: Frontier Pharmacist - "Pharmacy Workbench" by Nine Lives

Started by Zeta, November 22, 2019, 01:31:12 PM

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Zeta

Submission Information:

Series: Other
Game: Freddy Pharkas: Frontier Pharmacist
Console: Multiplatform
Title: Pharmacy Workbench
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Nine Lives

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NineLives


Libera

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-I think that some slurs would be useful in the right hand melody in a bunch of places.  Mixing in staccatos with non-staccatos can be kind of tricky to read and have slurs can help to really make the articulation clearer to the performer.
-The bass in bar 9 doesn't come in until beat 1.5, much like in bar 11.
-I'd cut the G in the left hand at the start of bar 14 as that isn't in the bass part and it kind of confuses the voicing there.
-Also in bar 14, the second Eb should be a D and then the following D should be a C I think.

NineLives

Quote from: Libera on November 28, 2019, 07:26:33 AM-I think that some slurs would be useful in the right hand melody in a bunch of places.  Mixing in staccatos with non-staccatos can be kind of tricky to read and have slurs can help to really make the articulation clearer to the performer.
-The bass in bar 9 doesn't come in until beat 1.5, much like in bar 11.
-I'd cut the G in the left hand at the start of bar 14 as that isn't in the bass part and it kind of confuses the voicing there.
-Also in bar 14, the second Eb should be a D and then the following D should be a C I think.
All right. I think I got most of these. I feel I did better with the slurs, but if any more need added or some don't fit, I'll change them up again.

Libera

Awesome!  Last thing I have is that maybe the Db grace notes in bars 4, 8 etc would be better as C#s since they resolve up to Dns.

LeviR.star

I might also add that the dynamic mf in m. 2 is overlapping with the slur. Maybe you could move it to the left?
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NineLives

Quote from: Libera on December 17, 2019, 02:36:36 PMAwesome!  Last thing I have is that maybe the Db grace notes in bars 4, 8 etc would be better as C#s since they resolve up to Dns.
Quote from: LeviR.star on December 17, 2019, 03:09:46 PMI might also add that the dynamic mf in m. 2 is overlapping with the slur. Maybe you could move it to the left?
Done and done!

Libera

Nice.

Quote from: LeviR.star on December 17, 2019, 03:09:46 PMI might also add that the dynamic mf in m. 2 is overlapping with the slur. Maybe you could move it to the left?

Thanks for catching that one, Levi.

Zeta