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[GEN] Sonic the Hedgehog 2 - "Mystic Cave Zone (2 Player)" (Replacement) by Yug Guy

Started by Zeta, February 12, 2020, 06:50:32 PM

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Zeta

Submission Information:

Series: Sonic
Game: Sonic the Hedgehog 2
Console: Sega Genesis
Title: Mystic Cave Zone (2 Player)
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Yug Guy


Replacement Information:

Links to Existing Sheet: MUS | MIDI | PDF
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)

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Yug_Guy


I have 2 Player written in parenthesis, but we can argue about semantics later.

Latios212

Sorry for the wait, things have been busy. Looks good, just a few things:
- RH beat 4 misaligned in m. 2, 4.
- Strongly recommend prioritizing one of the RH parts in m. 2 beat 4 over the other as that's really awkward to play.
- Please adjust m. 5 LH beat 1and others like it - it's not reasonable especially at this speed. One thing you could do is remove either of the G's.
- Flip the tie leaving m. 15.

Quote from: Yug_Guy on February 12, 2020, 06:51:31 PMI have 2 Player written in parenthesis, but we can argue about semantics later.
I dunno anything about this OST, so I'll leave that up to you and others to decide. Let me know if I should change the submission title.
My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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Yug_Guy

Quote from: Latios212 on March 17, 2020, 04:36:01 PMSorry for the wait, things have been busy. Looks good, just a few things:
- RH beat 4 misaligned in m. 2, 4.
- Strongly recommend prioritizing one of the RH parts in m. 2 beat 4 over the other as that's really awkward to play.
- Please adjust m. 5 LH beat 1and others like it - it's not reasonable especially at this speed. One thing you could do is remove either of the G's.
- Flip the tie leaving m. 15.
All fixed.

Latios212

Quote from: Latios212 on March 17, 2020, 04:36:01 PM- Strongly recommend prioritizing one of the RH parts in m. 2 beat 4 over the other as that's really awkward to play.
This is still unchanged - thoughts? I'd suggest getting rid of the eighth notes on top

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- Flip the tie leaving m. 15.
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Just the tie should have been flipped (ctrl+F). The stem should still point up.

Also, do you want me to change the submission title?
My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
who needs education when you can have WAIFUS!!!!!

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Yug_Guy

Quote from: Latios212 on March 21, 2020, 03:52:23 PMThis is still unchanged - thoughts? I'd suggest getting rid of the eighth notes on top
Oh, I thought you were talking about something else. I've fixed it.

Quote from: Latios212 on March 21, 2020, 03:52:23 PMAlso, do you want me to change the submission title?
I mean, unless anyone else says otherwise, I suppose you probably can.

Latios212

My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
who needs education when you can have WAIFUS!!!!!

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mastersuperfan

- Maybe move the Layer 2 rests in m2, m24, and m25 down a little bit, particularly the ones close to the Layer 1 notes (the one in m25 is directly clashing with Layer 1).
- RH eighth notes on beats 2.25 and 3.25 in m2/4—you might consider making those sixteenth notes followed by a sixteenth rest, or putting staccatos on them.
- I would make the Layer 2 notes from m5-13 staccato'd, but I can tell that that would get pretty cluttered. It's fine as is (especially if you omitted them stylistically), but you might also consider doing something like putting staccatos on the Layer 2 notes in m5 and then "simile" in m6.
- I would also consider turning the Layer 2 beat 4 quarter notes into eighth notes, particularly because in m6 and m10, the Layer 2 quarter note and the Layer 1 sixteenth notes kind of look like they're part of the same line, which looks ambiguous. I think having a Layer 2 eighth rest under the Layer 1 sixteenth notes would be clearer.
- In m5/7/9/11, RH Layer 2 also has a G-B dyad on beat 1, where you currently have a rest. If you wanted, you could add the dyad in full in m7/11 and simply add a G to Layer 2 beat 1 in m5/9 (since Layer 2 is already playing a B).
- You might consider moving the bottom notes of the dyad to Layer 2 in m14-15 RH, since I think the dyad at the end of m15 (one note tied, one note not) looks a little awkward. I tend not to write things like that unless adding layers would be a significant hindrance, but here it might be easier just to use another layer.
- The interval on m21 RH beat 1 can't really be played by the RH alone... however, the low F can be played with the LH. I would consider either putting a bracket around the F with "L.H.", or moving the F down to a separate layer on the LH staff and using a dashed line to connect m20 RH beat 4 to m21 LH beat 1.
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

Yug_Guy

Quote from: mastersuperfan on March 27, 2020, 11:34:36 AM- I would make the Layer 2 notes from m5-13 staccato'd, but I can tell that that would get pretty cluttered. It's fine as is (especially if you omitted them stylistically), but you might also consider doing something like putting staccatos on the Layer 2 notes in m5 and then "simile" in m6.
I think it's cluttered enough as-is. Some of your other suggestions will definitely help this, though.

Quote from: mastersuperfan on March 27, 2020, 11:34:36 AM- The interval on m21 RH beat 1 can't really be played by the RH alone... however, the low F can be played with the LH. I would consider either putting a bracket around the F with "L.H.", or moving the F down to a separate layer on the LH staff and using a dashed line to connect m20 RH beat 4 to m21 LH beat 1.
Opted for the second option.

Everything else should be fixed.

mastersuperfan

The staccato in m2 RH would probably look better if it were moved below the notehead.

The rests in m22 RH are oddly high for some reason.

If you want, you could opt to change the quarter notes in m21-22 RH to eighth notes to be consistent with the rhythm in m5-13.

That is all.
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

Yug_Guy

Quote from: mastersuperfan on March 27, 2020, 03:39:44 PMThe staccato in m2 RH would probably look better if it were moved below the notehead.

If you want, you could opt to change the quarter notes in m21-22 RH to eighth notes to be consistent with the rhythm in m5-13.
Done.

Quote from: mastersuperfan on March 27, 2020, 03:39:44 PMThe rests in m22 RH are oddly high for some reason.
Probably an artifact from an earlier version. Fixed.

mastersuperfan

Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

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