Static's Replacements

Started by Static, May 30, 2020, 06:01:39 PM

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Libera

Final Fantasy V: The Final Battle

-Bars 21-30 look incredibly cramped/uneven, especially the left hand.  I understand that you wanted to 5 bar systems somewhere to keep the sheet to 4 pages, but there are much better sections to choose for this.  For example, the final 10 bars work really well with 5 bars per system since there's less going on there.
-Have you considered just writing 21-25 an octave up so that you don't have to drop down an octave in 20?  I feel like dropping in 20 loses you some of the tension that you're building up.
-I'm not sure about the slurs in 27-28 as I think they're visually confusing.  Compared to 25-26 and 29-30, these ones go against the metre and I think it makes the groupings harder to distinguish, especially the one that goes across the barline.
-The dyad in the second layer of bar 60 beat 3 sounds to me like it should drop down to E B rather than G# E.
-The diminuendo in 63-64.  Need I say more?
-The dynamics could be a little better placed.  Some are off centre and others are too close to barlines etc.  Maybe just go through and check these.

Nice sheet.

Static

Quote from: Libera on February 19, 2021, 01:37:03 PM-Bars 21-30 look incredibly cramped/uneven, especially the left hand.  I understand that you wanted to 5 bar systems somewhere to keep the sheet to 4 pages, but there are much better sections to choose for this.  For example, the final 10 bars work really well with 5 bars per system since there's less going on there.
Fixed

Quote from: Libera on February 19, 2021, 01:37:03 PM-Have you considered just writing 21-25 an octave up so that you don't have to drop down an octave in 20?  I feel like dropping in 20 loses you some of the tension that you're building up.
Oh yeah that's a good idea, done

Quote from: Libera on February 19, 2021, 01:37:03 PM-I'm not sure about the slurs in 27-28 as I think they're visually confusing.  Compared to 25-26 and 29-30, these ones go against the metre and I think it makes the groupings harder to distinguish, especially the one that goes across the barline.
I think that's the point. I don't want those Es to be short, since they aren't in the original, it's a slur into the accented note rather than from it.

Quote from: Libera on February 19, 2021, 01:37:03 PM-The dyad in the second layer of bar 60 beat 3 sounds to me like it should drop down to E B rather than G# E.
I tried splitting up the channels to make sure, and it's E and G# (same exact RH notes in 59-61 as 51-52 except G# instead of Gn).

Quote from: Libera on February 19, 2021, 01:37:03 PM-The diminuendo in 63-64.  Need I say more?
I want the G# in m64 to be slightly less loud than m63, but slightly more loud than m65, so I thought a dim. would be the best way to write that.

Quote from: Libera on February 19, 2021, 01:37:03 PM-The dynamics could be a little better placed.  Some are off centre and others are too close to barlines etc.  Maybe just go through and check these.
Should all be fixed now I think

Static

Quote from: mastersuperfan on February 05, 2021, 09:35:20 PMFFV - The Decisive Battle
- m9-11: align your dynamics/cresscendos!
- m53-54: move the crescendo a bit up to be aligned with the surrounding dynamics.
- m76: move the forte a bit up to be aligned with the crescendo in m75.
Oops I missed this... all of those things should be fixed now

mastersuperfan

Quote from: Static on February 24, 2021, 07:33:30 PMOops I missed this... all of those things should be fixed now

Looks great! Accepted.
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Libera

The Final Battle

Had a little chat about some bits and pieces with Static over discord and the edits look good.  Accepted.