Octocrunch's Arrangements: Persona 3 Memories of You

[octocrunch]

Hello, I've just completed my first transcription and would like some feedback if possible please?

It's a transcription of Memories of You from Persona 3 by Kaedalus with a couple of my own additions to bring it closer to the original.
Original song:

Cover:

I've currently got it unlisted in Musescore since I'm not sure how to export it to finale yet.
https://musescore.com/user/8096396/scores/6239313/s/j_XIst

Any feedback would be much appriciated as this is my first time doing something like this.
Thanks, Octo.

[octocrunch]

Managed to export to a Finale file but since I've not used Finale I know there are some changes still to make such as changing the pedal line to be in the correct format and some overlapping lines I need to fix but for now here are my files.

.mid: https://www.dropbox.com/s/zrqovn7dgjbo3wm/Kimi%20No%20Kioku.mid?dl=0
.mscz https://www.dropbox.com/s/6q58wcc2m1tz6yi/Kimi%20No%20Kioku.mscz?dl=0
.mus https://www.dropbox.com/s/ytlf51qom7u2atn/Kimi%20No%20Kioku.mus?dl=0
.pdf https://www.dropbox.com/s/phqvxa0opt7xh5a/Kimi%20No%20Kioku.pdf?dl=0

Once again any feedback is much appreciated.
Thanks, Octo.

[Maelstrom]

Since we do original transcriptions/arrangements and not transcriptions of other's pieces, I can say we won't host it on the site and I don't have the time to check notes. I do have a few notational suggestions, however, after looking at the PDF
-Tempo marks should start above the note that they correspond to. NOt sure what's going on with m17...
-m21 is kinda .... weird. I'm unsure what note is in which layer or what's even going on there. Was it a transfer error or something?
-Oh, and it's time to talk about note beaming. Yours is .... questionable at best. Here's a brief guide on it. If you want something more comprehensive, take a look at this video Take a good hard look at your piece, because there's a number of measures that have issues. Some examples, not including everything, are m1, m4, m18, m19, m20
-Please, please show rests in parts with 2 layers. It's really hard to figure out where the dotted quarter notes fall in m13-15 because there's simply not rests before or after them.

That's a start, at least.

[octocrunch]

That's fine, I understand that. Thank you for the feedback and I'll be sure to implement it!