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[NDS] New Super Mario Bros. - "Bowser Jr. Battle" by LeviR.star

Started by Zeta, September 29, 2020, 05:16:36 PM

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Submission Information:

Series: Super Mario
Game: New Super Mario Bros.
Console: Nintendo DS
Title: Bowser Jr. Battle
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: LeviR.star

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LeviR.star





For whatever reason, it was tricky to find a suitable YouTube source of this song. Even GilvaSunner forgot about it!
Check out my Youtube channel for remixes and original music! LeviR.star's Remixes

Also check out my piano arrangements here on my PA thread! LeviR.star's Arrangements

Libera

This piece has some tricky accidentals in places, but the notes look great, very accurate.

-Mischievously.
-You could put an extra Bn in bar 9 beat 2 RH in between the octave Fs (like in the original).
-I hear the Ab resolve down to a G on beat 3.25 of bar 17 (in addition to the D going down to a Bn).
-It sounds like the chords in the opening have the wrong inversion.  I hear the lowest as the one starting on Bn/Cb.

Spellings:

For the first bar, these are some weird chords.  Excluding the first one, these all look the same and are just a semitone lower each time, so we should try to represent them the same each time.  (The first one is only one note off from that anyway).  I think my suggestion would be to use a combination of flats and sharps to get a result that looks like this:

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(Note that I've changed the inversion and spaced out the voices evenly afterwards).

The other tricky section is bars 10-13 where the bass line plays a fixed chromatic figure whilst the RH plays a descending chromatic pattern AND then it plays it again with the starting notes completely changed.  It's a real mess to write out in a way that's readable and consistent.  Here's what I came up with:

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I tried to keep the intervals consistent whilst avoiding any horrible overlaps between the spellings in the right hand and left hand.  I don't really know a better way to go about something like this.

The only other thing I can think of is that maybe you could argue for this to be written in C major rather than C minor.  I think it might make more sense for it to be borrowing the IIIb chord from the relative minor rather than borrowing the tonic from the relative major.  It might result in less accidentals overall as well, but I'll let you think about it / try it out.

LeviR.star

Quote from: Libera on October 16, 2020, 04:04:01 PMThis piece has some tricky accidentals in places, but the notes look great, very accurate.

-Mischievously.
-You could put an extra Bn in bar 9 beat 2 RH in between the octave Fs (like in the original).
-I hear the Ab resolve down to a G on beat 3.25 of bar 17 (in addition to the D going down to a Bn).
-It sounds like the chords in the opening have the wrong inversion.  I hear the lowest as the one starting on Bn/Cb.

Spellings:

For the first bar, these are some weird chords.  Excluding the first one, these all look the same and are just a semitone lower each time, so we should try to represent them the same each time.  (The first one is only one note off from that anyway).  I think my suggestion would be to use a combination of flats and sharps to get a result that looks like this:

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(Note that I've changed the inversion and spaced out the voices evenly afterwards).

The other tricky section is bars 10-13 where the bass line plays a fixed chromatic figure whilst the RH plays a descending chromatic pattern AND then it plays it again with the starting notes completely changed.  It's a real mess to write out in a way that's readable and consistent.  Here's what I came up with:

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I tried to keep the intervals consistent whilst avoiding any horrible overlaps between the spellings in the right hand and left hand.  I don't really know a better way to go about something like this.

The only other thing I can think of is that maybe you could argue for this to be written in C major rather than C minor.  I think it might make more sense for it to be borrowing the IIIb chord from the relative minor rather than borrowing the tonic from the relative major.  It might result in less accidentals overall as well, but I'll let you think about it / try it out.


Talked over everything here with Libera on Discord. Added all suggestions, including the switch from C minor to C major. Files updated.
Check out my Youtube channel for remixes and original music! LeviR.star's Remixes

Also check out my piano arrangements here on my PA thread! LeviR.star's Arrangements

Libera

Quote from: LeviR.star on October 17, 2020, 12:49:26 PMTalked over everything here with Libera on Discord. Added all suggestions, including the switch from C minor to C major. Files updated.

Awesome, approved!

Latios212

Quote from: LeviR.star on September 29, 2020, 05:19:23 PMFor whatever reason, it was tricky to find a suitable YouTube source of this song. Even GilvaSunner forgot about it!
Huh, that is weird. I guess the last time I've heard this was when I was actually playing the game... a very familiar tune though usually cut short by fireballs ^^

Quote from: Libera on October 16, 2020, 04:04:01 PMThe other tricky section is bars 10-13 where the bass line plays a fixed chromatic figure whilst the RH plays a descending chromatic pattern AND then it plays it again with the starting notes completely changed.  It's a real mess to write out in a way that's readable and consistent.  Here's what I came up with:

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I tried to keep the intervals consistent whilst avoiding any horrible overlaps between the spellings in the right hand and left hand.  I don't really know a better way to go about something like this.
Given that as you pointed out the bass plays the same chromatic figure under two different chromatic figures in the RH, I don't think it makes sense to try to prioritize having the sheet make sense vertically (i.e. clashing accidentals between LH/RH) over writing the RH part in a more reasonable way. In other words, I think we should treat the LH/RH parts more independently here, especially given that the LH part repeats.

Anyway, the way it's written all seems pretty reasonable except for m. 13. Here you have two strange parts in the RH - the Dbb-Bbb dyads which are hard to read and the A#-G dyads which break the consistent parallel sixths. I would suggest the following instead:
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The only clash you have here is between the Ab/An in the beginning which is easily notated, and the F#/Bb/G I think is easier to read too since those pitches are close to the home key of C.
My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
who needs education when you can have WAIFUS!!!!!

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LeviR.star

Quote from: Latios212 on October 18, 2020, 12:49:14 PMAnyway, the way it's written all seems pretty reasonable except for m. 13. Here you have two strange parts in the RH - the Dbb-Bbb dyads which are hard to read and the A#-G dyads which break the consistent parallel sixths. I would suggest the following instead:
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The only clash you have here is between the Ab/An in the beginning which is easily notated, and the F#/Bb/G I think is easier to read too since those pitches are close to the home key of C.

I felt like something was off here. Fixed! And thank you!
Check out my Youtube channel for remixes and original music! LeviR.star's Remixes

Also check out my piano arrangements here on my PA thread! LeviR.star's Arrangements

Latios212

My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
who needs education when you can have WAIFUS!!!!!

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