I wasn't saying it was the wrong octave, just that now there are quadruple ledger lines at the beginning.
Oops, I thought you were referring to the LH with the 8-clef reference, not the RH. Either way, the ledger lines in m9 are fine. It's brief and still readable; introducing an 8va would be more awkward.
Other things:
- You can optionally slur the grace notes to the principal notes if you want.
- You might optionally consider a courtesy C natural in m2 RH (i.e. the first measure after the pickup measure) and a courtesy Eb in m6 RH.
- Check the rhythm in m3 RH—the F on beat 4 should actually start a little earlier:
- Also shown in the above image: the last note in m3 RH should be written as a G# instead of an Ab.
- In m4 LH, the last Bb at the end of the measure should be lowered an octave, and the second-to-last Bb should be raised an octave.
- In m5 LH, the third and fifth eighth notes should be replaced by rests.
- In m2/4/6 RH, the RH note on beat 3.5 (i.e. the quarter note—B in m2, D in m4, D in m6) sounds like it should just be an eighth note followed by an eighth rest instead of a quarter note.
- In m8 LH, the second eighth note should be tied to the first note of the beat 2 triplet.
- m8-9 LH should be transposed up an octave.
- In m23/33 LH, the eighth note shouldn't be tied over to a half note afterward. There should just be a half rest for the second half since the eighth note is short, not held.
Once those things are fixed up, I think it'll look good, Finale formatting aside. Could you also remember to update the PDF/MID files too once you've made these changes?