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[N64] Yoshi's Story - "Tall Tower" by Bloop

Started by Zeta, June 22, 2021, 03:00:36 AM

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Zeta

Submission Information:

Series: Super Mario
Game: Yoshi's Story
Console: Nintendo 64
Title: Tall Tower
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Bloop

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Bloop


Static

  • I hear this just a slight bit faster than your written tempo, around 100bpm. Not really a big deal either way though lol
  • (De)crescendos should generally not touch barlines, unless it's going through a barline. In addition, you have enough space to line them all up horizontally, they're just slightly off.
  • I don't hear the RH dyad on beat 1 of m3 or 8. It sounds like it cuts off completely just for that one 8th note beat.
  • m10 should have a slur on the grace note like the others.
  • The RH chords in m14 and 15 have Bs and As underneath, respectively. For the RH alone it would be quite a stretch, but the LH could easily play those low Bs and As.
  • The Ab and Gb in those same chords should be G# and F#, respectively (E7 and D7 chords).
  • There are two additional voices under the dyads in m16-18 (G and C for example in m16). I don't think it's too hard to play all those notes with just the RH, but maybe I just have large-ish hands (but certainly not as large as maelstrom's)
  • Similarly, m18 beat 1 should have a B underneath the F-G dyads.
That's all I got, great sheet

Bloop

Thanks, fixed!

Quote from: Static on June 23, 2021, 02:22:01 PM
  • The Ab and Gb in those same chords should be G# and F#, respectively (E7 and D7 chords).
I kinda liked the a flat and g flat as a descending line from the a to the f, but it probably doesn't matter that much either way.

Quote from: Static on June 23, 2021, 02:22:01 PM
  • There are two additional voices under the dyads in m16-18 (G and C for example in m16). I don't think it's too hard to play all those notes with just the RH, but maybe I just have large-ish hands (but certainly not as large as maelstrom's)
I added one of those voices, mostly because the 4-note chords are a little bit jarring after the spread out 3-note chords, but also because I couldn't hear what the lower voice was doing in m. 18 (which is apparently a Db chord over a d in the melody o_O)

Static

Quote from: Bloop on June 24, 2021, 05:01:56 AMI added one of those voices, mostly because the 4-note chords are a little bit jarring after the spread out 3-note chords, but also because I couldn't hear what the lower voice was doing in m. 18 (which is apparently a Db chord over a d in the melody o_O)
Makes sense to me, looks good

One last little thing, the trill marking in m16 is going outside the staff, it might've moved as you were editing other things.

Bloop


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Latios212

Nice sheet! Notes all look good just have a few aesthetic things to point out:
- Flip the tie between m. 14-15 down so it points away from the upper layer
- The dynamic placement could be improved overall to be centered underneath the notes they apply to. Compare left (where I've poked them a bit) to right:
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The same applies to most of the other dynamics in the piece, they could use a bit of repositioning.
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Latios212

My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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