[Wii] Super Mario Galaxy - "Final Battle with Bowser" (Replacement) by XiaoMigros

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Submission Information:
Series: Super Mario
Game: Super Mario Galaxy
Console: Wii
Title: Final Battle with Bowser
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: XiaoMigros


Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS | MIDI | PDF
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)

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[Latios212]

Helped XiaoMigros make edits to this sheet (we need this replacement ) -

- The "gliss." text on the glissandos isn't necessary, the way line is indication enough to play a glissando
- The last system sounds like it should be one sudden dynamic change past the last chord strike instead of a slow diminuendo across the entire system so I'd suggest just putting a mf in m. 45 instead. (That chord could also use an accent+staccato articulation.)
- I'm not too sure about the need for that RH marking in measure 2. Firstly, do you want pedal in the first four measures? I would suggest yes - in doing so you can make the powerful strikes ring out more. If you use pedal, you could simply have the RH play the C#/G# line and leave the left hand where it was to avoid any hand crossing.

Other stuff as I check the whole thing:
- Rests in m. 2 LH should be moved down (top layer to normal rest height, lower layer further below the staff)
- I'd suggest removing the courtesy accidentals in m. 13 and 21. They're playing the same chords as the other similar measure in their sections and happen to also be after a system break right next to the keysig, so I don't think those would be misread.
- Last LH note of m. 24 sounds like Eb (same one as on beat 3) rather than Bb
- Would suggest adding in an A to the chord in m. 25 to fill it out a bit more (Dsus4). Similar to above, I don't think the courtesy natural is really needed here.
- Lower layer beat 1 of m. 26 is misaligned (Special Tools > Note Position Tool > right click and Remove Manual Adjustments)
- You could remove the bottom A in the chord in m. 27-28 since the A is already present in the lower layer (if you do so, make sure that re-align that A in the lower layer)
- It's a bit tricky to hear, but I think m. 30-32 LH would be better in fifths rather than octaves, like the previous new measures?
- I think the second chord in m. 29 has a D instead of Eb in it
- The last octave in m. 40 LH sounds like Bb rather than Bn
- Dynamics in m. 33 and 41 could be nudged left a bit to be centered around the noteheads

The last thing I have to do is check the chords in m. 41-44 but I'm getting a bit tired... so I'll come back to that later

I got everything above plus:
- a few miscellaneous poking/prodding of some spacing
- tempo is 152 instead of 145 I think
and I'm pretty much done checking at this point. For whoever checks this next, a look at the bottom layer in m. 2 and the chords in m. 41-44 would be appreciated - as I wasn't super sure about those.

[Bloop]

a look at the bottom layer in m. 2

I think it's correct, though the timpani part makes the A sound a bit more jarring than it should. Maybe moving that A or adding an A down an octave separates it from that part enough so our ears don't think of the two notes as an interval, but leaving it as is work too.

and the chords in m. 41-44

It's really hard to hear what's in between the octave doubled melody: I edited the files with something else, which I think is a bit closer to what's happening. I'm pretty sure it's not just minor chords though.
Along with that, I edited the files with the following changes:
-m1-4: The tempo here is q = 76, it's half time from the part that starts in m5. The end of m4 also has the same rhythm as the following bass pattern. I added a staccato at this last note too.
-m27-28: I don't think it's possible to hold the chord in layer 1 (except maybe for the very big handed). Using a pedal wouldn't work either because of the bassline, so I reduced the length of the chord. This allowed me to add the second trumpet voice in too, so there's some variation after the two bars before.
-m31: Added cautionary accidentals on the En's
-m33-40: Added accents in the R.H.
-m45: Moved the mf a bit to the left, so it's above the E

[Latios212]

I think it's correct, though the timpani part makes the A sound a bit more jarring than it should. Maybe moving that A or adding an A down an octave separates it from that part enough so our ears don't think of the two notes as an interval, but leaving it as is work too.

Ooh I really like octave doubling it below. It definitely helps to differentiate it from the upper layer, and makes it sound more powerful too.

The chords for 41+ sound fine at a quick play, no issues from me there. The other changes look good - for the tempo marking I'd suggest maybe a (quarter = half) marking after the new 152 tempo mark in m. 5.

If those couple of things sound good to you Bloop, you can make those last couple of edits and accept?

[Bloop]

Done!

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