[DELETED] [SW] Xenoblade Chronicles 2 - "The Past Revealed" by JZ

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Submission Information:
Series: Xeno
Game: Xenoblade Chronicles 2
Console: Nintendo Switch
Title: The Past Revealed
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: JZ

[MomoQca]

My comment:
m.31-38
I'm aware that there are multiple ledger lines in the top layer of the LH. Should I move them to the RH (while having the LH play these notes) for readability?

[Static]

• Regarding the ledger lines, I think it's fine. You don't really use more than 3-4 here. For ledger lines that go toward the center of the staff (like in m31-38), I try to limit it to 3 usually, and those that go outside (like 47-50), it depends on the context but 5 is a reasonable limit.
  Putting the upper LH notes in the RH in m31-38 would also be ambiguous since you have an 8va in the upper staff; I would just leave things where you have them for now.
• m4 RH: To help push the crescendo along, consider adding in some of the middle voices here in a lower layer (C#, G#, Bn).
• m8 RH beat 2: There's an additional E right above the D in this measure, unlike m6.
• m13-14 LH: Not sure where you're getting the bass voices here from; the original track stays in the upper register here. The lowest voice should be the G# below middle C.
• m15-22: Might be nice to write in the dynamic swells/fades here
• m16/18 RH beat 2: I'm not hearing the low B here, it just sounds like E-G#-B.
• m18-19 RH: Slur is touching the tie below it
• m21 LH: The piano doesn't play any lower notes here like in m19. It's just the strings, so maybe an accompaniment similar to m17 would work better here.
• m23-30 RH: All of these 16th notes sound like E to me. If you wanted to leave in the alternating notes, I would suggest flipping them around; the top notes should be E.
• m23: The p is intersecting the tie in the .musx, but the .pdf looks fine. I guess just make sure you're exporting everything from the same .musx.
• m27 LH: These are E major chords, G should be G#
• m31-38 RH: So, in the original track, this is a more subdued section. Doubling the melody in octaves I think throws off this balance. One idea I had would be to not double the melody at all (in the original, I don't think it is doubled in the lower octave, just in unison), and put the piano part in its original octave (mostly). You end up with a simple 2-layer RH part that frees up the LH for some extra string voices in the middle register:
  
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  If you'd rather keep the current LH part, I'd still suggest removing one of the octave doublings in the RH (either low or high would work).
• m47-50 RH: I'm not hearing the 8th notes at all here, it just sounds like more quarter notes.

[Static]

Bump for arranger, will you be around to work on this one?

[MomoQca]

Hi Static! Apologies for the late reply. I'm afraid I won't be able to work on this for quite some time, so I will go ahead and close this topic for a while—I'll revisit this as soon as I can! Thank you for your time and patience.