-m5 and 9: Maybe you could tie the notes in beat 1 to beat 7 too? Rests halfway through a measure seem a bit weird in pieces with pedal, because it might suggest the pedal should be lifted to mute the note.
-m16: I think I can slightly hear the D from the harp that you'd expect on beat 12, but it's very faint.
-m25: The L.H. note on beat 1 will most likely be rolled by most pianists: the Eb to G stretch is pretty wide, and having the 2nd finger play another Eb will be pretty hard then too.
-m29-44: Maybe you could move the strings countermelody to a different layer (when it isn't already in one) and move some notes up an octave to have them resolve more (for example: the C in m32 is the resolution of the D in m31. Having it resolve down an octave makes both notes sound isolated)
-m31: If you decide to keep the countermelody in its current layer, the R.H. note on beat 1 should have its stem flipped.
-m45-52: Maybe you could change the rhythm of the R.H. lower voice to all quarter notes, since it's a pretty clear polyrhythm for this whole section.
-m50 and 52: The dots next to the lower two notes in the L.H. touch each other: one of them should be moved up to the next staff space.
-m52: I hear D and Bn in the R.H. second voice on beats 3 and 5 (instead of C and Bb), and I hear the R.H. eightuplet more like a septuplet C-D-Eb-F-D-Eb-F, or as an eightuplet C-D-Eb-F-D-Eb-F-G tying over to m53.
-m60: The English Horn plays something else than the L.H. in this bar (from beat 2, C-Eb-C-Eb-F)
-m71: The harp actually plays C and Eb on beats 5 and 6 (instead of Eb and F), but you do miss out on the F on beat 4 because of that. Not sure what's best :p
-m81-88: Same thing here as in m29-44 about separating the voices in different layers.
-Does the piece repeat in-game too? If possible, we like to at least include a repeat mark/D.S./D.C. so it's clear where the piece repeats too, and denote an optional ending after that.
-As for the ending, maybe moving the R.H. down an octave and adding an Eb and G in-between sounds a bit better? In the original, only the strings and horn Bn resolve to C, but not the harp. Adding the Eb and G also gives some more harmonic resolution rather than just ending on all C's.
-fixed those two, but I swapped layers for m9 since otherwise the tie was interfering with the other layer.
-I actually don't hear the D at all, even with higher volume and it slowed. It probably has that mental autocompletion that actually doesn't happen due to the ostinato.
-Yeah I did some initial editing on some of these chords due to the concern about wide chord gaps. That's one of like 2 or 3 I left in that I thought could probably be played fine or at least with a roll. But I'll add a chord roll articulation to it.
-I actually had it as a secondary layer but removed it whenever it was without any rhythm differences to the primary layer so it was more legible, but I can go revert that. I'm assuming you would otherwise recommend the countermelody to be an octave higher then? (i.e. instead of the C4 range it's the C5 range) If so, then I'll try doing that for cases which already were in the C5 range. Hopefully that's fine even if it's less consistent with the countermelody, but let me know if it's not. Also at measure 37 do you happen to hear any of the countermelody in b1-6? I don't think there is but it's hard to tell on playback.
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-Ok cool, wasn't sure if I was allowed to do that or not.
-I tried fixing up the dots but they're always finicky on finale. Let me know if you have any specific positions you'd suggest for them.
-Fixed both, good catch. The eightuplet was definitely annoying to figure out.
-Added this in with the R.H. with b6 having a courtesy note for the overlap.
-I put in the notes for b1 and b4 for the left hand since they technically fit within the octave range, but let me know if you think this might be too difficult to perform.
-Done, but I also adjusted m95-m96 so the horn's octave stays consistent by modifying the harp a small bit.
-It does but I also am unsure how I can fit that in without adding in a 10th page (as it is it took a bit to squish it down to 9 pages while staying legible). Also it in itself is a very long track one time through, and with the OST version there is a way to interpret the final measure as the ending on non-loop cases.
-Done, I did add in the Eb and G across both hands though.
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Topic: [PC] Hollow Knight - "White Palace" by PlayfulPiano (Read 1332 times)