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Oreburgh Gate
This looks pretty good so far. Some comments from me:
- We should get rid of these alternating 8vas and 15vas. The best way to do that would be to just put a note at the start to play the right an octave above. (And then another note of course at bar 34.
- In bars 51-54 I don't hear the alternating C# D# in the bass. It just sounds like C#s to me.
- This is a comment for the whole piece: the spellings look funny in places to me. For example in bar 14-17 we have Gns that should probably be written as F##s. I'd have another look at the accidentals (maybe consider doing the piece in flats instead?) but if you're not sure we can probably sort something out.
- Speaking of bar 14-17, the left hand sounds a little inaccurate to me. I'm hearing:
(that's how I chose to do the accidentals here since the chord in bar 14 is just a D# major chord.) - In bar 19 and 23 the right hand As sound like A#s to me.
Hope that helps and if you have any questions ask.
Hi there, thanks for reviewing my sheet. I agree with the points that you've made and have made these corrections. I recall receiving some helpful suggestions a while back to correct the accidentals, so it may be that I simply missed updating m 14-17. I'm not very experienced with the theory behind accidentals and whether or not F# minor would be an appropriate key to use, so feel free to adjust my sheet if you feel it needs improvement.
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