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Re: The Official Pokémon Diamond, Pearl, and Platinum Project
« Reply #255 on: October 07, 2018, 06:51:44 AM »

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This looks pretty good so far.  Some comments from me:
  • We should get rid of these alternating 8vas and 15vas.  The best way to do that would be to just put a note at the start to play the right an octave above.  (And then another note of course at bar 34.
  • In bars 51-54 I don't hear the alternating C# D# in the bass.  It just sounds like C#s to me.
  • This is a comment for the whole piece: the spellings look funny in places to me.  For example in bar 14-17 we have Gns that should probably be written as F##s.  I'd have another look at the accidentals (maybe consider doing the piece in flats instead?) but if you're not sure we can probably sort something out.
  • Speaking of bar 14-17, the left hand sounds a little inaccurate to me.  I'm hearing:
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    (that's how I chose to do the accidentals here since the chord in bar 14 is just a D# major chord.)
  • In bar 19 and 23 the right hand As sound like A#s to me.

Hope that helps and if you have any questions ask.

Hi there, thanks for reviewing my sheet. I agree with the points that you've made and have made these corrections. I recall receiving some helpful suggestions a while back to correct the accidentals, so it may be that I simply missed updating m 14-17. I'm not very experienced with the theory behind accidentals and whether or not F# minor would be an appropriate key to use, so feel free to adjust my sheet if you feel it needs improvement. :)

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Re: The Official Pokémon Diamond, Pearl, and Platinum Project
« Reply #256 on: November 30, 2018, 03:39:34 AM »

Bump. How’s this going?
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Re: The Official Pokémon Diamond, Pearl, and Platinum Project
« Reply #257 on: November 30, 2018, 03:41:59 AM »

Still have a lot to do, waiting on arrangers for some. Chipping away at it in between other things.
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Re: The Official Pokémon Diamond, Pearl, and Platinum Project
« Reply #258 on: December 07, 2018, 04:52:41 AM »

Looking at how well the Smash update did as a test run for an update with a deadline, I'd like to experiment with setting more short-term goals and milestones for us to reach to help finish this project off.

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Re: The Official Pokémon Diamond, Pearl, and Platinum Project
« Reply #259 on: December 28, 2018, 07:52:57 AM »

41 - Battle! (Team Galactic) - JDMEK5

Great work! I do have some relatively minor comments, though.
  • Things seem a bit pushed towards the top of page 2. I'd recommend lowering everything a bit since you've got ample space at the bottom. Also think about perhaps decreasing space between LH/RH staves here since it's not being used.
  • Could we resolve the melody to a high A flat in measure 35 instead of including the lower E flat in the right hand? That voice really wants to finish ascending from the G natural. Similarly, I think it would be best to include the lead-in to the next section at the end of m. 41 (repeated C flats leading into the D flat).
  • How about just extending the 8va over m. 43-44?

I see only reason with all your suggestions. I have updated the file in the dropbox folder with the edits.

Just a stylistic point here, but what would you think about filling in the chords a bit more in the climax at m. 47 and 49 for a more powerful effect?
I think I left them out because what I had was exactly what was in the original, but I do like your idea way better so it is done.



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