[DELETED] [SNES] Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles IV: Turtles In Time - "Alley Cat Blues" by ContinueTheEnd

Started by Zeta, April 11, 2015, 03:59:53 PM

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Zeta

Submission Information:

Series: Other
Game: Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles IV: Turtles In Time
Console: Super Nintendo Entertainment System
Title: Alley Cat Blues
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: ContinueTheEnd

Tobbeh99

Here's the song for comparison.

You might consider rewriting this in swing quarters rather than a lot of triplets, I think it will look a lot cleaner that way.
Quote from: Dudeman on August 16, 2016, 06:11:42 AM
tfw you get schooled in English grammar by a guy whose first language is not English

10/10 tobbeh

Brassman388

Ditch most of the octave stuff you got going on in the treble staff. Most of the stuff in the bass line needs to be lower.

It just overall sounds a bit empty for a piece that has so much going on.

The rhythms are right, the tempo is right, key, etc.

It needs to sound punchier.

Tobbeh99

-Add metronome mark
-Add dynamics
-Add some articulations, like staccato and accents
- There's a middle voice that you're missing, the second voice doesn't play octaves but something more like fourths, fifths, thirds. I'm really bad at hearing this :/, you might slow down the song to facilitate hearing it. 
Quote from: Dudeman on August 16, 2016, 06:11:42 AM
tfw you get schooled in English grammar by a guy whose first language is not English

10/10 tobbeh

Bespinben

If you want your arrangement to be accepted, you should really respond to the generous feedback your submission has received.

Archived.
Quote from: Nebbles on July 04, 2015, 12:05:12 PM
Someone beat Bespinben to making PMD music?! GASP!

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