[DELETED] [3DS] Pokémon Super Mystery Dungeon - "Tree of Life: Roots (Two Pianos)" by InsigTurtle & braixen126

Started by Zeta, July 21, 2016, 02:59:46 PM

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Latios212

Quote from: dajwxp on October 23, 2016, 09:49:51 PMwell um, braix and i did this live and it worked so
Yes but there's still room for improvement ^^

As promised:

- Missing "II" aside second staff.
- Missing "and" in composer list
- Dynamics: I disagree with your use in 7-9. The sixteenth note layer does not increase in volume, and is definitely not "f"-worthy in 9+. The cresc. and f would be applicable to the top piano; perhaps move them there. I would suggest double checking use of dynamics throughout the whole sheet as well, just to be sure. Also check where your cresc/dims collide with barlines.
- M. 10 piano 1 sounds like a single note Ab.
- M. 13-20 RH of Piano 2 would look nicer in bass clef.
- Eighth notes not beams in 37? Any reason why p is to the left of the barline?
- Check keys throughout the song - 21-26 are in a different keysig than the preceding 13-20 despite them just being having the same melody and chords...
- M. 30-35: parallel thirds: Ab under the C in piano 1 RH
- M. 38-41: no articulations on the repeated chords?

Apologies for taking so long. This is really a splendid sheet!
My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
who needs education when you can have WAIFUS!!!!!

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Latios212

My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
who needs education when you can have WAIFUS!!!!!

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I'm gonna have to call this one off before it becomes 1 year old. Will update it in the meantime before reposting!