[DELETED] [PC] Undertale - "Power of -NEO-" by Yugikun

Started by Zeta, December 02, 2015, 08:30:01 PM

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Zeta

Submission Information:

Series: Other
Game: Undertale
Console: PC
Title: Power of -NEO-
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Yugikun

Bespinben

#1
Two things:

(1) Consecutive dotted values -- As a corollary to the "always show beat 3" rhythm notation practice, you also shouldn't have back-to-back dotted values in a 4/4 time. You should spell the rhythm as follows:


There is though a certain appeal to the way you have written it (3+3+3+3+2+2). If you wish to keep it this way, you should write the piece in an additive time signature such as 8/8 (i.e. [3+3+2]/8).



(2) You're missing harmonies in the RH. It's not just melody octaves.
Quote from: Nebbles on July 04, 2015, 12:05:12 PM
Someone beat Bespinben to making PMD music?! GASP!

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Tobbeh99

^^

Shouldn't the time signature be 16/16(3+3+3+3+2+2)?? 8/8 is 3+3+2. ... or wait both works, but 16/16 makes every note on beat, while 8/8 makes some notes of beat (sort of like 3 against 2). 

Also I don't know if changing key signature for measure 5-8 might make it easier to read.
Quote from: Dudeman on August 16, 2016, 06:11:42 AM
tfw you get schooled in English grammar by a guy whose first language is not English

10/10 tobbeh

Bespinben

Quote from: Tobbeh99 on December 03, 2015, 04:42:22 PMAlso I don't know if changing key signature for measure 5-8 might make it easier to read.

Speaking of which, the initial key signature is C# minor (4 sharps), not F# minor (3 sharps). It modulates up a half step to D minor (1 flat) in m. 5-8.
Quote from: Nebbles on July 04, 2015, 12:05:12 PM
Someone beat Bespinben to making PMD music?! GASP!

MLF for Chatroom Mod next Tuesday

Bespinben

Quote from: Nebbles on July 04, 2015, 12:05:12 PM
Someone beat Bespinben to making PMD music?! GASP!

MLF for Chatroom Mod next Tuesday

Olimar12345

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