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The Pokémon Mystery Dungeon Super Series!! Let the Journey Begin!

Started by E. Gadd Industries, February 23, 2016, 05:56:08 PM

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mikey

I think Davy signed up to be the bad guy
And I could easily end up being the bad guy too
unmotivated

Hero of Trains

I'd want to start as a bad guy too, but then have character development happen maybe?
Quote from: Dudeman on May 22, 2015, 06:24:42 PM
See guys? Trains isn't nice all the time.
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Trains is so nice that I'm sure she'd resurrect herself for a few minutes to compliment you back

E. Gadd Industries

Oh, hey, I started the Prologue yesterday, so inclusion in the prologue is over concerning sign-ups.
"Everyone is crazy but me"
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E. Gadd Industries

The Prologue is long. I mean, I was expecting that, but I wasn't expecting THIS. So, I'm splitting up the Prologue into two halves. Prologue P1 & P2. P1 should be out later today. I just have to edit and format everything (when I write, I write one massive paragraph, and that isn't proper conventioning).
"Everyone is crazy but me"
-The Sign Painter


The entrance to my lab is hidden... somewhere...
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BrainyLucario

When given the choice between adulting and music, choose music every time.

E. Gadd Industries

Check it out! Part 1 of the Prologue is UP!
(I'll edit into the OP tomorrow)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OiluhnGDSb9RdI3DvYYxh-y3WINA7lmJ_DjKgbl6YWA/edit?usp=sharing

EDIT: Crap, I forgot to reformat and such. Something else I'll do tomorrow. XD
"Everyone is crazy but me"
-The Sign Painter


The entrance to my lab is hidden... somewhere...
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mikey

#51
I lost it when I read "Braix, a Fennekin"

that was short you didn't have to split em up
unmotivated

BlackDragonSlayer

And the moral of the story: Quit while you're a head.

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AwesomeYears

I'm pretty impressed, can't wait for the next chapter!

BrainyLucario

When given the choice between adulting and music, choose music every time.

E. Gadd Industries

#55
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on March 07, 2016, 06:39:18 PMthat was short you didn't have to split em up
Really? Hmmm... Well, I'll combine both parts once I finish Part 2.

Anyhoo, it's great that everyone is enjoying the story so far! Any suggestions as to what I could do better?

EDIT: Also, the OP has been updated.
"Everyone is crazy but me"
-The Sign Painter


The entrance to my lab is hidden... somewhere...
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braix

Quote from: MaestroUGC on August 19, 2015, 12:22:27 PM
Braixen is a wonderful [insert gender] with beautiful [corresponding gender trait] and is just the darlingest at [stereotypical activity typically associated with said gender] you ever saw.

Oronoco

It's great!

Quote from: E. Gadd Industries on March 08, 2016, 07:37:53 AMReally? Hmmm... Well, I'll combine both parts once I finish Part 2.

You could definitely do this.

Just in case because it's a story
If you're the type who loves to go back and edit things a billion times (like me), it'd be nice to hear more about Trains, Braix, and Nebbles during the scene at school. They kind of "disappear" into the group, so it'd be nice to give them a few actions and little thoughts here and there.

I'm hyped to meet Arceus.
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Quote from: Yellow on October 13, 2015, 05:18:40 PM
...Really though. Don't let them take it away from you. That desire for something more, for adventure... for destiny. Don't let them turn it against you, either.

mikey

oh yeah that's a good point.  I forgot they were protagonists during that part
unmotivated

E. Gadd Industries

Arceus will probably the favorite character, just saying. XD I have plans for that plot! Also, hmmmm.... You guys are right, I probably should mention them more. Alright. Once I fix up Delfino Airstrip, I'll jump to that (along with a few minor errors and touch-ups)
"Everyone is crazy but me"
-The Sign Painter


The entrance to my lab is hidden... somewhere...
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