The Pokémon Mystery Dungeon Super Series!! Let the Journey Begin!

[mikey]

Arceus didn't really strike me as a deity any more than other legends did

[Oronoco]

I also love Trains' introduction.

[braix]

"Battle shmattle. What do you think PE class is for?" Braix retorted.
I absolutely love this line it's perfect

[Hero of Trains]

Yay! It's great! One tiny quibble, looks cannot be sarcastic. Pet peeve that I must point out, my apologies. But it seems to be shaping up into a great story (with awesome main characters, if I do say so myself).

[mikey]

and pet peeve can't be one word
although when someone gives a sarcastic look you know full well the face they make

[Hero of Trains]

Yes, autocorrect is evil, editing now.
I know the face, I make it often. I think it is fine to say that in colloquial speech, but I prefer to point it out in actual writing (although this is also fanfiction posted on an Internet forum, so...)

[E. Gadd Industries]

XD Well, what's an alternative that I could use that would provoke the same mental image?

"Battle shmattle. What do you think PE class is for?" Braix retorted.
I absolutely love this line it's perfect

It's nice to know some of the quotes are memorable!
I haven't fully finished reformatting and editing, but I do plan to...plan...the other half of the prologue at the moment. (I can't fix anything because I'm at school and can't log on to my Gmail account)

[E. Gadd Industries]

Part 1 is fixed and is ready to be Czech-ed out! If you have other suggestions or have anything specific that I need to include in Part 2, you know what to do!

Also, is Mike J anyone on here? I got an email from them requesting edit access so they could "do spellcheck and junk for me if I want". Seems dubious to me, but I've been surprised before. Once.

[Latios212]

Mike J

sounds like nocturne (can't say if it is for sure)

[braix]

yeah thats nocturneofshadow

[E. Gadd Industries]

OH! Ok, thanks for letting me know!

[mikey]

obvs me who else would it be

[Latios212]

obvs me who else would it be

Michael Jackson.

or maybe Michael Jordan

[mikey]

In my Democratic Citizenship class last year the guy next to me did a double take when the signature sheet went around.  He was like, "wait, is your name Michael Jordan?"  Unfortunately my signature is just messy.
#shortanecdotes

[BrainyLucario]

How's the story coming along.