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[NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario

Started by Zeta, April 04, 2018, 12:50:42 PM

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BrainyLucario

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ThatHiddenCharacter

Quote from: BrainyLucario on May 17, 2018, 07:49:47 PMI'm hearing coolest.

I can tell you without a shadow of a doubt that the official lyrics are cruelest. Brawl changed it to coolest, but the original was cruelest. It's hard to tell because of the poor audio quality.


Stay tuned, I'm about to check the sheet for other errors.
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ThatHiddenCharacter

I assume the piano is supposed to be the instruments in the background? If so, one thing I noticed is that in some parts when Ashley sings, namely m5 and any similar, there is a vibraphone or something playing along with the singing. Now, I wouldn't mention it if not for the fact it always place the same phrase even when the rhythms change for what Ashley sings.

Also, it's "You better learn my name 'cause I am" with the You on beat 4.5 in the previous measure, for both times this phrase appears (m4-5 & m53-54). Also, commas do not go before the word "beacuse" in English grammar, even if it's shortened to 'cause.

And the last measure. The LH has a quarter note pattern going Bb minor chord-F minor chord-Octave Bb. And the RH should probably be played in octaves as well. You could also have the last quarter in the LH be a chord, but that's up to you.

Now, I can't figure out how to edit the lyrics without messing everything up, but here's a file with the other edits I mentioned. If you disagree with anything I've said, don't hesitate to speak up about you're viewpoint.
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BrainyLucario

I hear what you're saying about the vibraphone  and I agree with all of your changes
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ThatHiddenCharacter

Quote from: BrainyLucario on June 09, 2018, 01:47:29 PMI hear what you're saying about the vibraphone  and I agree with all of your changes
Alright. You (or an anyone really) will have to fix the lyrics, since I broke everything when I tried to.
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BrainyLucario

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ThatHiddenCharacter

Quote from: ThatHiddenCharacter on June 09, 2018, 10:38:57 AMI can tell you without a shadow of a doubt that the official lyrics are cruelest. Brawl changed it to coolest, but the original was cruelest. It's hard to tell because of the poor audio quality.

Quote from: ThatHiddenCharacter on June 09, 2018, 12:02:42 PMAlso, it's "You better learn my name 'cause I am" with the You on beat 4.5 in the previous measure, for both times this phrase appears (m4-5 & m53-54). Also, commas do not go before the word "beacuse" in English grammar, even if it's shortened to 'cause.

Quote from: ThatHiddenCharacter on June 09, 2018, 02:25:57 PMAlright. You (or an anyone really) will have to fix the lyrics, since I broke everything when I tried to.
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BrainyLucario

I've always used commas like that and last time I checked a lot of songs don't follow English grammar to the T

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ThatHiddenCharacter

That's not the only thing I said though. It's "cruel", not "cool". You also have notes in there that are supposed to have "You", but don't (You better learn my name).
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Check out my Youtube channel for remixes and original music! LeviR.star's Remixes

Also check out my piano arrangements here on my PA thread! LeviR.star's Arrangements

BrainyLucario

When given the choice between adulting and music, choose music every time.

BrainyLucario

When given the choice between adulting and music, choose music every time.

Olimar12345

#27
You're inconsistent with your lyric formatting. Syllables of the same word that start different sounds should be separated with a hyphen. Similarly, ending syllables that extend past one note or are held for a long note should be indicated with a line. The "A ASH LEY!" bit should be written as A - SHLEY" with the hyphen being underneath the second note, since that vowel is being extended past one note. Note changes on the same syllable are also commonly accompanied with a slur marking. The main point here is that the name isn't "Aashley."
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BrainyLucario

fixed but I am currently working on the beginning measures where the lyrics are squished
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BrainyLucario

Sheet has been updated with the lines spaced out right thanks to libera's help
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