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Author Topic: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario  (Read 1322 times)

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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #15 on: June 06, 2018, 07:59:29 PM »

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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #16 on: June 09, 2018, 06:38:57 PM »

I'm hearing coolest.

I can tell you without a shadow of a doubt that the official lyrics are cruelest. Brawl changed it to coolest, but the original was cruelest. It's hard to tell because of the poor audio quality.


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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #17 on: June 09, 2018, 08:02:42 PM »

I assume the piano is supposed to be the instruments in the background? If so, one thing I noticed is that in some parts when Ashley sings, namely m5 and any similar, there is a vibraphone or something playing along with the singing. Now, I wouldn't mention it if not for the fact it always place the same phrase even when the rhythms change for what Ashley sings.

Also, it's "You better learn my name 'cause I am" with the You on beat 4.5 in the previous measure, for both times this phrase appears (m4-5 & m53-54). Also, commas do not go before the word "beacuse" in English grammar, even if it's shortened to 'cause.

And the last measure. The LH has a quarter note pattern going Bb minor chord-F minor chord-Octave Bb. And the RH should probably be played in octaves as well. You could also have the last quarter in the LH be a chord, but that's up to you.

Now, I can't figure out how to edit the lyrics without messing everything up, but here's a file with the other edits I mentioned. If you disagree with anything I've said, don't hesitate to speak up about you're viewpoint.
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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #18 on: June 09, 2018, 09:47:29 PM »

I hear what you're saying about the vibraphone  and I agree with all of your changes
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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #19 on: June 09, 2018, 10:25:57 PM »

I hear what you're saying about the vibraphone  and I agree with all of your changes
Alright. You (or an anyone really) will have to fix the lyrics, since I broke everything when I tried to.
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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #20 on: June 15, 2018, 03:01:30 PM »

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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #21 on: June 15, 2018, 03:10:36 PM »

I can tell you without a shadow of a doubt that the official lyrics are cruelest. Brawl changed it to coolest, but the original was cruelest. It's hard to tell because of the poor audio quality.

Also, it's "You better learn my name 'cause I am" with the You on beat 4.5 in the previous measure, for both times this phrase appears (m4-5 & m53-54). Also, commas do not go before the word "beacuse" in English grammar, even if it's shortened to 'cause.

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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #22 on: June 20, 2018, 05:11:57 PM »

I've always used commas like that and last time I checked a lot of songs don't follow English grammar to the T

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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #23 on: June 20, 2018, 07:52:42 PM »

That's not the only thing I said though. It's "cruel", not "cool". You also have notes in there that are supposed to have "You", but don't (You better learn my name).
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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #25 on: June 22, 2018, 12:25:55 AM »

Yes I know I've fixed those
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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #26 on: July 02, 2018, 04:44:57 PM »

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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #27 on: July 02, 2018, 05:43:08 PM »

You're inconsistent with your lyric formatting. Syllables of the same word that start different sounds should be separated with a hyphen. Similarly, ending syllables that extend past one note or are held for a long note should be indicated with a line. The "A ASH LEY!" bit should be written as A - SHLEY" with the hyphen being underneath the second note, since that vowel is being extended past one note. Note changes on the same syllable are also commonly accompanied with a slur marking. The main point here is that the name isn't "Aashley."
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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #28 on: July 11, 2018, 05:43:50 PM »

fixed but I am currently working on the beginning measures where the lyrics are squished
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Re: [NDS] WarioWare: Touched! - "Ashley's Song" by BrainyLucario
« Reply #29 on: July 17, 2018, 06:07:38 AM »

Sheet has been updated with the lines spaced out right thanks to libera's help
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