Submission Information:
Series: Fire Emblem
Game: Fire Emblem: The Sacred Stones
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Comrades
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Zeila (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=4766)
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Quote from: Yug_Guy on October 03, 2019, 08:53:00 PMCOMMUNISM INTENSIFIES
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- In m. 15 either move the rest below the whole notes or flip the stems up for layer 2 (I would recommend the latter)
- Intentional that the Bb is included in both layers in m. 19?
- I would suggest keeping the voices separated in the last few measures even when they move in parallel. The top voice in m. 24-25 for example is very distinct from the lower line that continues playing ascending staccato notes.
Quote from: Latios212 on November 17, 2019, 09:15:47 AM- I would suggest keeping the voices separated in the last few measures even when they move in parallel. The top voice in m. 24-25 for example is very distinct from the lower line that continues playing ascending staccato notes.
I ended up moving the top notes down an octave in order to make the division clearer, and then I also flipped the slurs and added staccatos
I fixed the other stuff too, thanks!
Sounds good. I think it may be better to flip layer 2 up in m. 23 and 25 though so the layer doesn't have to flip between m. 24-25 (D-E) and 25-26 (E-F#) but it's alright as is too.
Anyway, looks good!
Looks pretty good generally. Just I think the top notes in bar 6 should be G then E as those seem to be the melody notes here, at least as I hear it.
Also obviously I'll fix the accidentals afterwards.
Quote from: Libera on November 20, 2019, 04:24:14 PMJust I think the top notes in bar 6 should be G then E as those seem to be the melody notes here, at least as I hear it.
Zeila asked me to make this edit for her since she's currently busy and I was going to need to edit the accidentals anyway so I've put up new files.
Quote from: Latios212 on November 20, 2019, 03:51:23 PMI think it may be better to flip layer 2 up in m. 23 and 25 though so the layer doesn't have to flip between m. 24-25 (D-E) and 25-26 (E-F#) but it's alright as is too.
Zeila didn't really have a preference on this but I personally think it's better the way it currently is, so I think I'm just going to leave this as-is if that's alright.
I shall now accept!
This submission has been accepted by Libera (https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=5291).
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