Submission Information:
Series: Pokémon
Game: Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time & Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Darkness
Console: Nintendo DS
Title: Beach Cave
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: FiveNineSquared (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=5296)
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Just did some basic typesetting. Reset staff size to 6.5 millimeters to be in accordance with historical rastral sizes for solo piano music (6.0 to 7.4 are the limits, with 6.5 to 7.0 being the norm). Did alot of "un-XML"-ing since there are usually a lot of artifacts it generates. Standard printing margins are 0.5, with sides allowable up 0.75 -- this I set to 0.625 to offset the ungainly width of the US Letter paper while still giving a decent amount of horizontal width to each system of music. Gave a small 0.05" increase in height in the grand staff (some more and some less depending on whitespace) to give more breathing room for articulations and dynamics -- always avoid collisions like the plague. Finally, I condensed your self-made ending to 1 measure by starting a volta-style repeat mid-measure -- this eliminated the problem of having to have either 1 system of 4 measures (too tight) versus 2 systems of 2 measures (too wide).
[MUSX] (https://www.dropbox.com/s/4hcd21thhwfoe2s/beachcave.musx?dl=0)
Thus sayeth the Gould
(https://www.dropbox.com/s/3d5g2wcubqk6dbr/gould1.jpg?dl=1)
Seems like Finale Notepad can't open .musx files, so I can't see what you did exactly. Can you upload a mus file instead? :P
Still, thanks for providing those pointers and modifying the sizes; had no idea what the standards were for those. I'll be using that image a lot from now on! (It's kinda hard to do what you've done in Notepad though)
I think I used to believe that the soundtrack for EoTD and EoS had slight differences so I added Yoshihiro Maeda into the composer list. Thanks as well for removing that.
Update!
All the formatting should be fine and dandy right now. Changed the score a bit.
Looks pretty good. Thanks, Ben, for the formatting fix!
Didn't get too in-depth with note checking, but it generally sounds correct. One thing I noticed:
The copyright information should be font size 10, not 12. Also, no copyright information is needed on the second page. You can delete that.
Quote from: Sebastian on December 01, 2017, 04:28:26 PMThe copyright information should be font size 10, not 12. Also, no copyright information is needed on the second page. You can delete that.
Done! Thanks for the correction.
Hiya, finally checking time lol
- As mentioned somewhere I forgot, first LH note of measure 23 should be an Eb.
- Measure 25 LH beat 3 should be Db-C.
- The run in measure 16 is a bit off - it should start with a C, ascend to G, and descend to D, similar to the following measure.
Oh, and change the game title to "Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time & Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Darkness" for consistency - lemme know if you want me to take care of anything for you due to Finale issues.
Quote from: Latios212 on December 21, 2017, 07:10:51 PMHiya, finally checking time lol
- As mentioned somewhere I forgot, first LH note of measure 23 should be an Eb.
- Measure 25 LH beat 3 should be Db-C.
- The run in measure 16 is a bit off - it should start with a C, ascend to G, and descend to D, similar to the following measure.
Oh, and change the game title to "Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Time & Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Darkness" for consistency - lemme know if you want me to take care of anything for you due to Finale issues.
Done! I hope the formatting didn't change.
Hehe, it also looks like I forgot to edit the mus file on top of the mscz file when you told me to change the Eb :P
Oops, sorry this fell to the bottom of the board >__>
Is the PDF not generated off of the .mus file? I'm noticing a bunch of discrepancies. If you want help formatting and stuff, I can do that for you in Finale so we can keep all the files consistent and stuff.
Also before we accept, could we get another opinion (Insig, looking at you) on the time signatures, particularly in m. 1-3 and 19-21? The way it's written doesn't quite sit well with me, but I don't have a solution in mind.
Oh boy, this is late. Sorry, the notif went into my spam folder :p
Um... yes about that, I was using the musescore file for the pdf hehe
If the mus file looks fine formatting-wise I can replace the pdf. I think the only weird thing going on is the cross-staff beam at m11 when the 1/16th beams with the 1/8th.
I don't know about the time sig, I thought the 10/8 at the beginning was the most appropriate. Tbh now I think the m19-21 can be rephrased the same way.
This is looking very close, but the time signatures here are still a bit of an issue. In both the intro and m.19-21, you need to be consistent in how you accent the motif, since it doesn't sound like it changes in the original. The beat pattern in the intro is also rather strange, although no matter what, it's going to be a bit messy.
Whatever you choose, think about how a performer would play it: what would be the most intuitive way to show how where the accents fall so that the performer gets the feel of the music?
(unless you're Stravinsky)
Feedback taken -- I think if I try to fit any time sig that's x/8 it's gonna be super confusing, so I decided to change everything to fit in x/4.
ie,
(https://i.imgur.com/LkgxuxJ.png)
and
(https://i.imgur.com/uoFbdPV.png)
Does it look off?
The mus file (https://www.dropbox.com/s/lto7jdas8tjo2rf/BeachCave.mus?dl=0) needs to be re-fixed a bit again, by the way. I can't edit some stuff on Notepad :/
Probably for the best if nobody can definitively say what it is. 4/4 is always safe :)
If the rhythm doesn't make much sense, at least the time signature can be easy to deal with innit
Hmm, maybe make the first two measures 5/4, then you'd have a 2/4 measure before going back to 3/4. That way, you'd introduce each measure with the sixteenth-sixteenth-eighth pattern.
Quote from: InsigTurtle on April 05, 2018, 06:31:00 PMHmm, maybe make the first two measures 5/4, then you'd have a 2/4 measure before going back to 3/4. That way, you'd introduce each measure with the sixteenth-sixteenth-eighth pattern.
To be frank that'd just be the 10/8 version but with 5/4 instead lol
Not sure which phrasing to use. I'm stuck between 3+3+2+2 and normal 2+2+2+2+2
I would keep it as 2+2+2+2+2 unless you decide to rebeam the other 4/4 section to fit it, which could also work
Okay, I think I'd like to stick with the file I linked to here:
Quote from: FiveNineSquared on April 05, 2018, 04:21:43 AMThe mus file (https://www.dropbox.com/s/lto7jdas8tjo2rf/BeachCave.mus?dl=0) needs to be re-fixed a bit again, by the way. I can't edit some stuff on Notepad :/
If someone could get to formatting the measure numbers, the ties around m20 and tempo marking properly, that'd be nice :D
(and apparently notepad doesn't allow for pdf export ergh)
For now I'm gonna update the mid file with this version.
I can make any edits you need. This one looks very close to me. Does anyone have anything else? If not, I'll update those fixes for you, FiveNine, and then accept.
Insig requested a small edit with the repeat bar (breaking the last bar at the second beat). I guess I'll do that edit now and post the mus here when I'm done:
EDIT
mus: https://www.dropbox.com/s/w8722lq1ihdfds2/BeachCavefix.mus?dl=0
pdf: https://www.dropbox.com/s/buorhmnkpvxwqmu/BeachCavefix.pdf?dl=0
Insig and I made a couple edits and the files are updated now. Sorry this took so long, but congrats on getting your first sheet accepted!
This submission has been accepted by Latios212 (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4344).
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