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1/25/17 Iamatology (n.)- WHY ARE YOU BUYING CLOTHES AT THE OLOGY STORE

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Wow, that's pretty impressive! That's a lot of notes...

Anyway, some things I'm noticing!

First, just nitpicky formatting stuff.
- The URL is way too low on page 1.
- Slur overlapping with triplet in m. 10.
- m. 32, molto...? Disconnect beats 3-4?
- The eighth rests in section D (LH) are awfully close to the beam.

Suggestions for de-cluttering.
- I know how much you love using layers, but I really think it'd help simplify things and free up a lot of space if you combined layers in some places. Like m. 1-4 RH, there's no holding that whole note throughout the whole measure. Likewise with measures 8 RH, and so on. Even partway through a measure, like 23, I think it would help. It just looks funny with a half rest on top of those octave chords which pushes the tuplet and articulations to the bottom.
- Tied note from 16-17 can't be held, it just takes up space. Similarly with 33-34 LH.
- Some of those mid-staff dashed lines I really don't think are necessary. Like the intro, it's pretty clear to just keep gradually crescendo-ing, and the dashed line looks almost like an 8va/vb line so I think you could do without.

Notes on other things.
- Triplets: In a lot of places like the beginning of section C (m. 18 beats 3-4) you have a quarter+two eighths rhythm in the melody which... doesn't sound quite right. Listening again I can't say it sounds exactly like triplets either. In any case, in places like m. 23 when you have that against triplets in the LH it sounds super awkward so I'd check that again.
- Section E: seems kind of off. First, the timing is off for some of the notes. The entirety of what you have for m. 46 should occur one eighth note earlier, you can hear those notes don't fall on the beat (listen to the drums). I'm also not sure what the cross-staff slur is supposed to mean in 47, and in general I'm having a hard time visually following the line in the original in your sheet. It also seems like there's a note missing on m. 47 beat 4.
- Ending: Definitely err on the side of simplification here. No one wants to read a 9-tuplet (105-tuplet??) or triple dotted half note. The timing is pretty loose so take it easy on the performer and give them something easier on the eyes.

All that said, wow, nice job haha.

Haha yeah I was gonna say that it looks and plays like the super dead TFG

I mean now that it's free everyone will probably be playing it instead of dropping tons of money on bulky spinning figurines

Surprise mobile app release

Pokémon Duel??

No resolutions at all!

I already skipped 3 weeks this year though, I really should stop doing that

That's like all the weeks so far

Source?

^braix ya there?

some minor things with the LH, check for me:
- m. 12 LH should look as m. 2 currently does.
- m. 2, 4 LH is all E's
- m. 4 LH E falls on beat 4, not 4.5
- m. 14 and 16: LH strikes again on beat 2.5, same note.
- m. 20 LH needs a lower B on beat 2.5

oh yeah and the 16th note parts at the beginning should be triplets

I can just edit the files for you if that's ok

"live"

"cemetery"

It's not just that, it's the arrangement itself. A complete lack of regard for how a pianist might read it, along with wrong notes, are the big downfalls here.

Deleting soon.

Looking real nice! Some more comments:
- About the eighth rests in beat 2 of m. 1 and 2: yeah, that voice doesn't play there but the percussion still plays on the beat so it sounds a bit odd having a rest there. I'd recommend replacing the rests with a C below.
- Is there any reason the melody is lowered an octave throughout most of the song? It results in the RH becoming uncomfortably close to the LH in a few places.
- Rhythm grouping: When in 4/4 be sure to show beat 3. Here that would mean breaking up the half note into an eighth tied to a dotted quarter.
- Ties look better now! Maybe flip the ones in 30-31 still?
- m. 29-36: spice up the bass a little bit! You've got two different types of drums here, so perhaps something like using a different octave of the same note to help differentiate between them.