I should have listened to this transcription back in your thread, Latios212.
- I agree with Zeila on adding the harmonies to Bars 13-16. I actually think the harmonies get dropped in Bars 17-18, so I don't think those 2 measures need to be adjusted similarly.
- Bar 20 actually mirrors Bar 4 less than you'd think - I don't hear the G above Middle C in the original for Bar 20 - the F above Middle C is a lot more prominent there.
- I don't know whether your current set-up in Bar 40 is for ease of playing, but the "brass" harmonies actually start in Beat 4 there in the original, not Beat 4.5 like you currently have it.
- Whenever I sing Bar 47, I sing the melody's (right hand) C note an octave above what you have written there (probably influenced by the high glissando there). While I do hear a lower C in Bar 47 in the original, it's actually a Middle C so I don't think you need to respect it. I'd also appreciate any nod towards the high glissando in Bars 47-48 - even substituting Bar 47's melody C note with the first part of the glissando would be enough.