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I also hear Bb on top

as do I

same

I was really confused at first, but then I realized I was listening to the wrong spot. I've fixed it now

[[SNES] Kirby's Dream Land 3 - "Ripple Field 1"]

[SNES] Kirby's Dream Land 3 - "Ripple Field 1"
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This was a bit trickier to arrange than I expected

what about last measures?

I'm not sure what you're asking. Are you referring to the special tools I mentioned? I can help you out with those if you want

-The opening bar seems to be (not insignificantly) shorter than a full bar.

Sounds like about an 8th note shorter.

-The line in bar 6 (and again later) sounds like its around the same octave as the previous line rather than an octave above it.

I agree, and yet at the same time I don't agree. I think having specifically m6 and m22 up an octave helps to differentiate it from the lines in m4-5, 20-21, and 23. m10 and 26 are in the correct octave, but they're still higher pitched than the surrounding lines so I didn't feel the need to move them. I also just think it matches better with the higher voice in the original piece - having it down an octave sounds too low to me on piano. My main goal was to give an illusion of different voices responding to each other rather than just one continuous melodic voice, but it's tricky to do that with this piece since so much of the original is differentiated by instrumental timbre instead of range. With a piano, all you have is piano.

-I feel like the Gn and Cn on beat 1.5 of bars 6 and 10 (respectively) should be flats but I'm not 100% certain because those harmonies are pretty hard to pick out.  Same for the later occurrences.

Ah, yeah, nice catch. It actually should be an Ab (not Gn or Gb) in m6 and Cb in m10. I also changed the Gns to Abs in m22 and 26.

-It sounds to me like the Bb should be on top for beat 2 in bar 9.

I hear the F on top still

-I'm struggling to even hear anything interesting going on for bars 15 and 19, let alone something that matches what you wrote in.  Is the line just super quiet?  If so, is it even worth including?

It's very faint, but I hear that upper voice moving around - I'm not completely sure exactly what the melodic line is, so what I wrote was my best approximation. I'd rather have something there than nothing there.

-I feel like the detached quavers in bars 16-17, 28-29 would be better as just crotchets.  They don't sound particularly detached to me in the original.  They're certainly less detached than the non-staccato quavers you've written in for the bass line.[/quote]
Hm yeah I think so too now. Done

-Bar 23 beat 2 the left hand sounds like an F rather than a G like it was in bar 19.
-Would recommend a double barline at the segno.

Done and done

-Bars 19-27 sounds louder and fuller to me than 5-18, but your dynamics are the other way around.  I think it'd make sense to swap the mf and mp here.  The crescendo in in 25 would then also be less abrupt.  (If you change this remember to drop or swap the dim in bar 18.)

Hm, I still hear the opposite. In m5-18, you have the full string section come in, but m19-27 is just the bass, keyboard, oboe, clarinet, and flute. The texture feels a lot more sparse there. That crescendo is abrupt though, so I changed the forte to a mezzoforte. The melody in octaves give it a loud enough sound anyway.

-Could we be consistent with titles for this game?  I've been going off of https://vgmdb.net/album/48 and your previous sheets matched this too.  As in 'A Gathering of Stars in the Night Sky'.

Done

Nice sheet.  I've recently been trying to get back into playing more so I'll definitely have a go at this one.

I'm looking forward to it

I'm archiving this one due to inactivity - please resubmit when you're able to make all the changes

• I think the system distribution is fine (4-5-3), but you should make the spacing on page 1 more even (there's a lot of empty space at the top). If you play around with the spacing, you could also try a 6-6 distribution (6 systems per page), where only 2 pages are needed.
• It'd be nice if the systems on page 3 were lined up with the ones on page 2. Right now, they're slightly off.
• The composer list should be separated by commas; you can also condense it into 2 lines of text.
• The key signature should actually be G Major. The chord progression is a standard blues progression (G7-C7-G7-D7-C7-G7).
• You're missing a tempo marking.
• You should include the first 4 measures, but make them a rest (right click > Multimeasure Rest > create).
• For m37-47, you can use the Note Position Tool, Dot Tool, and Accidental Mover Tool (all under Special Tools) to make sure none of the notes, augmentation dots, or accidentals are overlapping. It might also be easier to flip the layers on the RH staff because Layer 1 flips up by default and Layer 2 flips down by default.

Everything else looks good

Because of the relatively slow-ish tempo, I think you could add those 32nd note bits if you want. I don't think it would make it that much more difficult. Otherwise, looks fantastic.

Sorry for the wait on this one!

• m10 LH beat 3: I think you should put a D# above the B and get rid of the F#, to show the resolution of the E in previous chord. By having the chord still be 3 notes (B-D#-A), it still sounds just as light as before.
• You might want to put a dynamic change at m11, like mezzoforte (and make m3 mezzopiano).
• I know I went over this measure before in Discord, but after listening again, I hear m11 LH more like this:
  
• m10 LH beat 4.5: This sounds like it should be long instead of staccato.
• m13 LH beat 2.5: This also sounds like it should be long instead of staccato.
• m13 LH beat 3.5: I hear an F# under the G#.
• m13 LH beat 4.5: I don't hear the A.
• m15 LH beat 1.5: I hear an A above the G.
• m16 LH beat 4: This also sounds like it should be long instead of staccato.
• m18 RH beat 3: I hear this as four 16th notes (G-F-D-B) rather than an 8th and two 16ths.
• m27 RH: You might want to consider putting the flute trill there since it's a more active part than the chimes. Up to you though.

Hey are you still around?

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The song is Companions

for the first one, i agree that it wouldn't make sense to put it in and it should be kept simple. i also don't hear it that well.

I'm guessing you mean you disagree? It's fine to leave it out, but I think adding it in might be beneficial so that players could play it if they wish - and could leave it out as well if it's too challenging. It just gives people some more options. If you want to add the other voice I can help you out with the notes, most of them are just a 3rd below the top voice. Up to you though, don't feel like you have to.

don't hear it as such on the third one.

I still hear that note an octave up. I've listened to multiple recordings and isolated the channel in an emulator and it sounds pretty clear to me.

don't know to fix the last one (in notepad, at least)

Fixed it for you; you can find the file here
(I also made a few other formatting adjustments, including spacing and copyright info size)

I can't select "Atari Jaguar"

Fixed

Looks good

Oh I see what you're talking about. I suppose I could add them, but I think just by being different notes they're already naturally accented compared to the repeated notes below them. I also added accents to the following measures since the top notes remain the same. Reverse accents do exist, and they look like this ◡, or a note is simply put in parentheses (like a ghosted note). However, both of these marks are often used for other purposes such as ◡ to indicate bends for wind instruments, etc., so they're not used very often.

Thanks for the feedback