Messages

Excuse me, Jacopo, but... is this just the NES Konami "Pause" sound effect?

[AudioStretch (Flash)]

Well, the most glaring error I can hear is the two LH eighth notes at the beginning of m. 1 - 8, which should be Cs, not Ds. If you use AudioStretch (Flash), you can raise the pitch of the song up an octave to hear the bass more clearly (I use it for that often).

Ok, before we go any further, listen to that bass line in the original again, and fix any mistakes you find in your sheet. There's too many for me to list.

I have a few suggestions (I'm only trying to help you):

- my computer blocked the PDF download to "Versus", saying that it detected a virus. While this may not be true, have you considered switching to Dropbox?
- you should really include all past arrangements in your original post, so that we can go back and check ones made before your latest sheet
- listening to the MIDI, I can tell you have a lot of wrong notes (from memory of my own arrangement of this). If you can try to tackle the above, we can get that taken care of

Again, I'm only trying to help you. But please, these suggestions will make things so much easier for us.

Happy birthday, you two!

[Levi - Secret Mine]

Levi - Secret Mine
- m. 2 beat 3 RH should be A-C (different from m. 10!)
- In m. 6 and 14 you put a courtesy Dn in the RH but not the LH. Just wanted to point that out, up to you what you want to do with it, if anything.
- m. 26 LH beat 2.5 sounds like an Eb instead of C. Makes sense too because parallel sixths.
- You could consider changing from 15ma to 8va at m. 19 instead of 23 to avoid ledger lines below the RH staff. But if you want to keep it at the section change, that's fine too.

Looks good otherwise!

- never caught that... sounds so strange now...
- ooh, thank you (courtesy accidentals strike again!)
- sounds right
- looking at it, while I see no ledger line problems if they were to go up an octave, I sorta like the idea of the 8va indicating the next section, so if it's alright I'm going to keep it where it is

Thank you much, Latios!

LeviR.star

Winterland (Stage 5)

This looks pretty good, just got two comments.
-In the version I found, there's an extra bar after 41 (2nd time) before it goes back to bar 1 that you've missed out here.
-The bass moves in bar 33 and maybe consider putting that in, either instead of the chords or in addition to (by cutting the right hand note early the right hand could play those chords).

- how did I never add that in?... fixed
- I never caught that, either (go figure... it was one of my "12 Days" sheets). How does that look?

Thanks, Libera! I also updated the LH articulations a little, if you would like to give your input on my new changes.

Folder files changed again.

[LeviR.star]

For consistency I'd add in the En in the right hand as well in bars 2 and 4 and the Gn in the left hand of bar 8 like in bar 16.

It was kinda hard to read this sentence at first, but I think I got them.

LeviR.star

Level 4: Ice Cave

Very upbeat and merry, indeed!

-The left hand C in bar 23 sounds like it's the same length as the right hand notes rather than a staccato quaver.
-In the left hand in bar 12 the E should be a D.
-I'd suggest moving the 8vb at the end slightly more to the left to cover that note better (maybe the 8va in bar 14 as well).

Very minor comments; nice work.

Thank you; fixes made.

Files in my folder updated.

^ Can someone seriously explain what this emoji means?

My list, from proud of (5) to most proud of (1):

5. [SNES] Super NES Classic Edition BIOS - "Menu"

4. [PC] Deltarune - "Beginning"

3. [GCN] Mario Kart: Double Dash!! - "Circuit" (Replacement)

2. [NDS] Mario Kart DS - "Nintendo WFC Menu"

1. [Wii] Wii Channels - "Wii Shop Channel"

Honorable mentions go to my on-site Castlevania: The Adventure arrangement project and my Mega Man (1) replacement project.

I choose these because I had fun making them, the sheets turned out really (relatively) good in their first drafts, and I learned a lot getting them accepted (minus "Beginning", which I'll be submitting later). I need to thank everyone here for helping me get these sheets ready, as it has always meant so much.

You'll be posting a list, too, right, Latios?

-Maybe someone else knows better, but is your notation for straight eighths standard?  I don't think many pieces have this effect going on so there might not really be a nice accepted notation.
-I understand why you went with Fns in bars 2 and 4 but I think since they're not really harmonic I'd just write them as Ens for clarity.
-With the ascending line in the final bar I'd write the last Ab as a G# just to keep the pattern the same in every triplet (up down up, up down up etc.)
-With some of those fast triplet sections, I'd consider cutting back on some of the repeated harmony notes just because I think it won't affect the sound really at all but it'll be way easier to play.  For example (for bar 11):

Spoiler

You cannot view this attachment.

[close]

Let me know what you think.
-Courtesy accidentals are something that this piece would benefit from a lot since there's a lot to keep track of.  Things like Ens in the bass in bars 2, 4 etc since we have Ebs and Ens in the right hand, Gn in the left hand in bar 16 since we've got a Gb striking at the same time in the right hand.  You could add in more if you want to be really explicit, but that's up to you.

- I've seen tempo markings like "Straight Eighths" or "♩=♩", but since it was changing so frequently in this song, I went and created a simple new notation, and I thought I'd leave it up to you guys for now
- Accidentals fixed
- Good idea. I also went ahead and altered m. 17; check to see if that fits your liking
- I've never really believed in courtesy accidentals (I grew up reading music w/out them) but I fixed the spots you suggested. Any others I am open to changing as well
- Thanks for checking my sheet, Libera. Sorry the video was so hard to find; that usually isn't a problem with my sheets

- You're using a template that already has the staff size set at the happy ideal of 0.65cm so you there's no need to use the resize tool. (Actually, I don't think the resize tool should ever be used, except maybe for ossias. But I'm sure Ben would have a way of getting around that).
- I re-spaced everything so it's more aesthetically pleasing and makes better use of the two pages it was already taking up.
- You don't need the parenthesis in bar 26 in the LH because the is no clash with the RH (both are 8va).
- Bar 21 has a small rhythm grouping error that I fixed. I'm guessing you just skipped over it because bar 17 was grouped spot on.
- I really don't think the double bar lines belong here. The idea behind them is that they are used in conjunction with a significant change of time signature or key signature or to indicate the start of a new section. Here it seems like they were being used to indicate the start of a new phrase, which isn't what they're meant for. If you do want to indicate phrase lengths, phrase markings are a much more effective way of communicating this.
- I've always thought that it looks better to have the speed indication after the character indication in the tempo marking.
- I threw in some clef changes from 16 onward. I just thought that it was hanging around in the shark bait long enough to warrant it. Feel free to change them if you want.

- Ooh, that looks miles better. Thanks so much for fixing that, Deku!'
- Yeah, that part confused me a little -- don't know why I forgot to fix it
- Most likely. Thank you for pointing that error out
- I've gotten used to using them for that in the past year, but I can stop. Thank you; I never knew that's not what they were for
- Well, while I still used special tempo markings that's how I always wrote them, but I can make an exception here. (Mainly just a preference, but I left it there w/ your edit)
- I was having troubles with the clef changes while the page size was so small, but with the systems spaced out it looks a lot better and works well
- Thank you for everything, Deku, this really helps a lot

Files in my folder have been updated w/ the edits.

Please take me off for "Thrash Machine", as I'm not doing it anymore, or any other sheets for this project.

[Levi's 2018 Winter Update Sheets]

I'm jumping in on this with some sheets that I made for last year's 12 Days of Sheets (which I thought were supposed to be Christmas-y)

Levi's 2018 Winter Update Sheets

(I added the Vs. Ice Climber sheet, a conveniently recent arrangement, when I noticed Yug post his Ice Climber stuff here)

While I see that you've allowed plenty of space for left-hand margins (and that's fine), the first system seems indented a little too much to me. Maybe you should pull it back to the left some?

The last chord of measure 10 has A flat, not A natural.

Ooh, glad you caught that. (For some reason I'm satisfied to hear an even more dissonant chord.) Thank you.

The F double sharp in measure 21 should be spelled G natural (it's an A sharp dimished chord). You could also have the 8va line continue over measure 22, for consistency.

I was wondering about that, given that all the rest are thirds (but what do I know?). Fixed.

If you want, you could add the echo for "Unknown".

Good idea; I've added pedal markings.

I don't hear the upper octave in measure 24.

Listening to it and noticing that the dominant instrument voice is an octave down, I get where you're coming from, but I personally still hear a voice on the top octave.

On the topic of octaves, I hear the LH playing octave dyads in "No Return (Intermission)", but I didn't know if it would be better to leave it as-is, or to somehow incorporate the top notes (perhaps by adding pedal markings to make it sound more connected?) I'm open to suggestions.

I don't even know what I'm submitting anymore.

I guess I'm doing this one because Brassman helped me with some changes. But he originally had me use a clef for vocal music, so I replaced it with a "play R.H. one octave higher than written".