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Quote from: Bloop on February 06, 2022, 02:38:53 AMI still heard m7 beat 4.5 as I had though (Ab-Bb-Db, the F below may be there too but I hear the G-Ab movement a bit clearer)
Yeah, that makes sense to me. I'm not sure if you disagree since you didn't mention it, but I'm still hearing m8 beat 2.5 as having Bb on the bottom. Everything else looks really nice!
-m4 RH beat 4: I don't hear the G here (this intro is doing a NES pastiche so it makes sense that there'd only be 3 voices :P)
-The chords in m7-8 are a little hard to hear, but this is what I'm getting:

-m7/8 LH sounds like it's doubled an octave down
-In m24 the dog instrument is doubling the melody an octave down, you could maybe do something like this:

-For m35/43 RH beat 4.5, it sounds like there's just 2 grace notes, a Bb and a C (if you still don't want to include them that's fine)
-m61 RH beat 4: The bottom note should be a Dn

Looks like m6 RH beat 2 is still missing a staccato.
It also looks like some erroneous staccatos got added, in m5, m6 and m9 specifically.
Quote from: Radiak488417 on October 31, 2021, 10:58:01 AM-m5 all notes except beats 1, 2, 3 and 4 (every offbeat)
-m6 all notes except beats 1, 3 and 4
-m9 all notes except beats 1, 2 and 3
Honestly I don't think I really appreciated this song enough before, it's quite nice.

Like I mentioned to you over Discord, I feel that the LH pattern in m9-12 doesn't quite capture the rhythm of that section, specifically the chords hitting on beat 2 (beat 2 isn't really accented there in the original). I'd suggest having them hit on beat 3 to match the bass rhythm, like this:

To me this sounds a bit closer to the sound of the original, and I don't think it adds too much extra difficulty either.

Some misc. note things, all in the RH:

-There's an F on beat 6 of m6
-m15 beat 4 might have an F on the bottom?
-m19 beat 1 the Bb should be an A
-Any reason the bottom notes in m19 aren't in layer 2 like m23?
-m20 beat 1: The F# should be on the bottom
-m20 beat 4: I hear an Fn in this chord
-m24 beat 4: I don't hear the A here
-The chord you have for beat 4 of m26 is nice, but it doesn't really sound like there's any harmony there in the original
-m27 beat 4: I don't hear the C here, but I do hear an F on the bottom
-m27 beat 6: I think there's a Bb here
-m27: I think the bottom notes on beats 3-6 can probably be in layer 1 since they're the same length as the melody

There's also some spots where beat 2.5 of the bass sounds staccato/shorter than it currently is in the sheet. If you want to keep them all the same that's fine too, since it seems pretty random (the measures I hear it in are 14, 16, 18, 19, 21, 22, 25, and 26).
Ah yeah that makes sense, I missed some of the earlier discussion. All looks great to me  :)
Looks like you missed the LH  :P
I think both the RH and LH on beat 1 of m34 should be tied over from beat 4.5 of m33, like this:

You might have omitted this to avoid a jump, which makes sense, I just like the anticipated beat here and I think it'd be cool to include. You could take out the lower notes on beat 4 to make it easier if you wanted.

Quote from: JacopoTore on November 10, 2021, 09:33:48 AMFirst of all, thank you for the help and for the corrections, which are so precise and clear.
No problem, happy to help out!

For m11, here's my reasoning for raising the line an octave: I personally can't play it the way you have it written out, a white-to-black tenth is impossible for me to reach without rolling. If it was in a slower context with pedal it wouldn't be an issue, but at 180 BPM and staccato, most people I know would find this prohibitively difficult to play. Plus, in measure 2 you've already raised the middle line an octave from where it is in the original, so why not do it again here?

Almost there! The staccatos in m3 look good, but I was just using m3 as an example—the rest of the RH in the A section still needs more staccatos. I would still highly recommend listening to the video I linked ( in order to find all of them, but in the interest of getting this accepted, I'll just list all of them here:

-m4 all notes except beats 1, 3 and 4
-m5 all notes except beats 1, 2, 3 and 4 (every offbeat)
-m6 all notes except beats 1, 3 and 4
-m7 all notes except beats 1 and 3
-m8 all notes except beats 1, 3 and 4
-m9 all notes except beats 1, 2 and 3
-m10 all notes except beat 1 (I'd also make beat 3 a quarter instead of an 8th)
-m11 all notes except beat 1

Also it looks like you deleted the staccato on beat 1 of m3 LH, it should still be there.

Finally, like Latios mentioned, I would still strongly advocate doing this for m11 to make it easier to play:
Project Archive / Re: Th3Gavst3r's Halloween Sheet
October 30, 2021, 07:48:59 PM
This looks fantastic, I'm so glad this sheet is going to be on the site!

-For m8 RH, I've always heard the melody note on beat 3.5 as being an octave lower than you currently have it. I know it's a weird jump from the chord on beat 3 but that's what I hear as the more prominent note (you could leave out the F for playability if you want). I also hear a D on beat 4, you could include that instead of the F there if you wanted. Also shouldn't the chord symbol here be something more like Fm/Bb or Bb7sus2?
-For m23, you have the chord labeled as a Bb9sus in the sheet, and Static listed it as a Bb9sus4, but the 4th isn't actually there—it's a 7sus2 chord. Whenever I see "9sus" or "13sus", I usually infer that it's a sus4, but in this case since it's a sus2 which is a bit more uncommon I think just calling it an Fm/Bb might be better. I'm no expert on this though, so let me know if I'm wrong.

Sorry for the last-minute feedback, hope it's not too much trouble!
Quote from: JacopoTore on September 06, 2021, 10:19:47 AMhaha
did it
Ah I didn't see that you updated the files, sorry about that!

This is looking really nice! There are still some articulations you're missing in the A section, for example in m3 RH all notes should be staccato except for beat 1 and beat 3. Other than that, here's some formatting stuff:

-The composer/arranger info and title are still looking a bit cramped, I would move the title up and the composer/arranger info down so that they aren't intersecting, and reduce the amount of space between the titles and subtitles. You could also remove or squish the slur in m2 to make even more space, but I understand if you want to keep it the way it is.
-Tempo text could be moved down a bit
-The start of the 8va in m1 could be moved a little bit to the left. Additionally, it doesn't need to extend all the way to the end of m2, just to the final notes.
-The segno in m3 should be centered over the barline.
-The volta bracket in m18-19 is disconnected a tiny bit, it should be a continuous line.
Just a quick correction: this piece was actually composed by Yasuaki Iwata.
Site News / Re: One more updater update
October 05, 2021, 06:23:30 PM
Thanks for everything MSF, you've done so much for this community and your incredible work has been valued by all of us. Good luck on your future endeavors, and enjoy your break! I'll miss your Discord name color matching your pfp  :'(
As far as the B section goes, like Playful said, I'm hearing the LH very differently. Here's what I'm getting for m9 and m10, for example:
I left out the 16ths because I'm not hearing them super prominently. IMO it sounds a bit too busy with them written out, but it's up to you if you want to include them.