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That shows you for firing all of the people who could have managed the picket line!

Those edits look good, but I just remembered something that I spotted when I looked at this before but I obviously forgot to put it in my post.  I'm hearing the C restruck on beat 2.25 of bar 11 rather than the Eb.  Sorry for forgetting to put that in last time.

Most of my comments are about the left hand part as the melody notes look fine for the most part.

-Is there any reason not to make the first E chord in bars 1,3 etc be in root position?  The bass part is playing an E there so I think that would make the most sense.
-The F# on beat 4.5 of bar 8 and 12 should be an Fn.
-It should be a Dn on the bottom of the chord in bars 19-20, not an En.
-Again, I think that the chord in bar 21-22 should be in root position.
-Not sure about all the chord changes in bars 31-32.  I'm hearing them just as different E chords to begin with and later on it sounds like they restrike more towards the end of 32.  If you could have another look at this bit that'd be great.
-I think that we could do something more interesting in the left hand in bars 15 - 22.  You could restrike the bass notes as in the original or maybe follow the slow arpeggio-like stuff.  Try it out and see if you can come up with anything, because it moment it sounds quite empty compared to the original.
-The way that the structure is laid out isn't particularly pleasant but I can't come up with any alternatives that are much better so maybe we have the best we're going to get.  That being said, if anyone has any thoughts than I'd like to hear them.
-The 'to coda' I think is generally written with the symbol which I think is less confusing.
-I'd recommend a double barline before the segno.
-In terms of the overall layout, currently the coda is very squished and you have plenty of white space in other places.  With that in mind, this is my suggested layout:

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-I don't hear the G# on beat 3.5 of bar 32.
-The pdf currently only has the second page on it for some reason?
-Double barline at the key change in bar 22.

Sorry about the wait!

Sorry for the wait!  Checking now...

-Eb on beat 1.25 in bar 5 should be a Dn.
-In bars 4 and 5 I think that final long run (starting on beat 3.5 of bar 4) would probably be better at pitch, or at least higher than it currently is.  I get that it means that the right hand can lead directly into bar 6, but I think having a single jump there isn't so bad (whether it's two octaves or one).
-I'm not convinced about the time signature in the final two bars.  I had a bit of a think/look and this was what I came up with:

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I think the patterns, particularly the left hand ones, make much more sense when you write it out like this.
-Also, note in the above picture that I changed a lot of the accidentals because there's a lot of mixing up sharps with flats going on in the chromatic stuff.  I won't go through them here because you can see what changes I'm suggesting in the picture, but let me know if anything isn't clear.

Thanks for having a look!

- m21 LH beat 2 sounds to me like a D instead of a C.
- m23 LH beat s sounds to me like a C instead of a Bb.
- m23 LH beat 3 sounds to me like an A instead of an F.
- m24 LH beat 3 sounds to me like an A (above the staff) instead of an E.
- m25 LH beat 2 sounds to me like an F instead of a G.

While some of these notes are present, I'm pretty confident that in all of these cases I'm following the correct voice (I double checked them all).  Probably the one I'd be most liable to add in is the A on beat 3 of bar 23 but since everywhere else I've gone with only a single note on each quaver beat I think it'd be a little odd to change it in that one place.  Also, I wasn't sure exactly where beat s is, but I'm hearing both of those Bbs still as Bbs.

- I'm not a huge fan of the spacing on m17 beat 3, particularly how the half notes in Layer 2 are moved slightly to the left to avoid clashing with Layer 3. I think this is a case where it would be neater to just combine the half notes (Layers 1 and 2) into one layer.

I could do that but I just want to make it really clear where the melody is exactly.  It's a little messy but I don't think it's that bad and I personally think it's worth it for clarity's sake.

- Pedal marking accidentally left unhidden in m7?
- The "molto cresc." in m5 is touching the arpeggio line and should be moved to the left. I would also move it upward to be vertically aligned with the piano marking.
- In m8, was it intentional for the decrescendo to end and the mp to begin at beat ~1.5? It seems like an oddly specific placement.

All of these should be fixed now!

-Bottom note in left hand bar 35 beat 3 should be an E?  Just an input mistake there I think.
-On beat 4 in bars 20 and 28 I hear the bass jump down an octave (so another A crotchet but an octave lower).
-The last crotchet in layer 2 of bar 52 is misaligned.

All of the above hasn't been addressed/fixed.  Also, I noticed that there are still some doubled accidentals needing to be fixed (bars 27, 44 and 54).

About the spacing of the systems, something like this is what I was imagining:

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Other edits look good!

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Sweet!

Sorry for the wait!  Here's the file: https://www.dropbox.com/s/pxx1m2yhmzjybne/thatoneguy_blank_01.mus?dl=0.

15va treble clef isn't used in piano music (neither is 8va treble clef for that matter) and also 15vas are generally to be avoided if possible.  I just put in an 8va across the whole of the right hand which is hopefully good enough!  You also get the 0.65cm staff size because its nearly always the best.  Let me know if I messed anything up.

(for the last point, slurred the 32nd note runs).

Yeah that's what I actually meant, sorry for not being clear.

All checks out on my end.

Bump for arranger.

I'm going to archive this for inactivity.  Feel free to resubmit it when you've had the time to address the feedback.

The Ab at the end should be a G#.  Other than that this is very nice.

Add a slur on the grace note in bar 21?  Best to be consistent I think.

Other than that, looks nice to me.

Did you mean for the pedal to end on beat 3 in bar 4?  That's how it sounds to me in the original.

Otherwise, looks good.