Quote from: Bloop on November 05, 2021, 04:05:56 AMoh huh, I wanted to try using pictures of dynamic markings instead of italicized letters, but maybe I'm the only one who can see those and I just didn't notice (they're media.discordapp.net images). This was what I meant:(maybe this does work though: You cannot view this attachment. and You cannot view this attachment.)
I think it's fine without the echo: the delay feels a bit random, and adding it to the sheet might just make it a bit too messy to hear the difference between the two. Going with a p at m29 would work enough though, so it's clear that it should be at a lower dynamic than the part before.
Just going by 2 un-modulated measures per system it is about the same as 4 modulated measures per system. I don't think it's that hard to see the pulse, as each sextuplet is one beat long, but triplet 16ths would work too for showing the 8th pulse:
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Anyway, that's just how I view it. I can see the 8th triplets are a bit more recognizable, so if you really prefer that, it's alright too. I personally just feel the metric modulation would be more confusing to the player than the 16th triplets. Also, did you see this part of my comment about the tuplets?I meant just changing the G in the middle of the chord to Ab:
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I really don't hear that top line though. I only hear the instrument that's playing the main melody D-C (and a slidy synth doing the F-Eb), and the electric piano/pingy synth that's doing the F-G-Ab-G figure.
I actually meant it as D-G-Eb. In m70-71, the main melody instrument plays F-Eb-D, while the electronic piano/pingy sinth plays F-D (and stays on D during m71). I see you initially removed the top octave D in m71, but doing this, you could put it back in again:
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One thing I apparently forgot to mention: in m73, I don't hear the Ab in the R.H., I think it's only in the L.H.
-I'll add the mentioned dynamics then, sure.
-Alright. That's fair.
-I missed that about the triplet. I made the noteheads smaller, hope that looks fine.
-Oh ok, sure. Changed that to Ab.
-I swear I hear two notes during beats 2 an 4 of m62, not just the one though. It sounds too muddy to simply be one note imo, and I don't think it's reverb in this case. Maybe it's not D C C Bb specifically but I do think there is that second note layer.
-Oh actually I think I get it listening back. So because of the instrument choice used in the RH, I kinda have it where the synth represents the higher octave, but only when the piano is also playing. That's why in m71 I took out the higher octave, because the piano stops playing there. Hope that's fine.
-Removed the extra Ab in m73.
Updated.