Messages

[Rainbow Across the Skies]

Sorry for the late response. I was quite busy from irl stuff, so I might have neglect this for too long. Now that I'm less busy, future update should go more quickly from my side.

Rainbow Across the Skies

• I uploaded the .musicxml file instead of the .mus file originally, oops! The (updated) .mus file is now uploaded
• I heard the bass plays a quarter note in m31 beat 2
• I heard the guitar note at m47 beat 4 as a slide down instead, so I keep that as a quarter note
• I don't think there is a way to flip the tie direction in Finale notepad? The ties remain unchanged for now
• The other stuff mentioned should be accounted for in the new version

Red Streamer Battle

• There are a few things that I can't fix by using Finale Notepad, namely the tempo text size, location of the segno marking, and the font style of the D.S. marking
• I would like some more opinion on the dynamic between the melody and interlude part, so I have kept the dynamic markings as is for now
• The other stuff mentioned should be fixed

Thanks for checking the sheet! I seems to overlooked the note lengths and articulations in my arrangement frequently. I have fixed them now, as well as the other mistakes mentioned.

I will be arranging the following music tracks:

• "Red Streamer Battle" - Paper Mario: The Origami King [Original] (Submitted)
• "Rainbow Across the Skies" - Kirby and the Rainbow Curse [Original] (Submitted)

I'd like to nominate the theme of arrangements. This can include:

• multiple arrangements of the same theme (differences on instrumentation, meter, scales,...)
• tracks that use the same (leit-)motifs or musical ideas
• tracks that fits other meanings of "arrangement" (plan, ordering,...)

For the first two options, arranged sheets should be in sets. Arrangers can collab and work on a set of sheets together, and sheets that form a set with on-site sheets are also okay for submitting.
"Special Arrangement Update" :kekdog:

[The Grand Finale]

The Grand Finale
The edits looks good. I have made some new changes at m. 26 RH (removed lower notes), and mm. 51-58 RH (changed lower notes). Please take a look.

The Grand Finale (2 piano ver)
Sheet edited.

[The Grand Finale]

The Grand Finale
I hear a quarter on b4 of RH m25, not 16ths
I'm not sure how I feel about LH m35-50. It takes a background voice from a high register and pulls it lower and it then overpowers the rest of the ideas the LH is trying to play. I would recommend either reverting it to the first instance, or moving notes the 8ths are hitting along with the bassline personally. Keep it how it is for m50 though.
I think something like this would work quite well for m27-34

Changed.

The Grand Finale
Also up to you, but adding in some pedal can make the arpeggios easier because the performer doesn't need to hold the notes at all.

I have added a "con pedale" text at the start.

Looks good. I am alright with the changes made

-You didn't make all the changes you said you made...

I must have forgot about something when I edited the sheet. Sorry about that

Lots of stuff in the banjo section RH
m24 b4.5 - A (above the next note), not a d.
m25 b2.75 - F, not Db
m27 b3 - F, not a rest.
m29 b1 - I hear a D here instead of the F#, b3 is a D#
m30 b1 - I hear a C# here instead of the F#, same with b3
m31 - b1.23, 2.25 - Bn, not a Gn.
m32 b1 - E, not A. b3-3.25 are E->C#, not A->E. Beat 4 is supposed to be an octave higher.

LH stuff:
m9 - Chord on both hits here is a Bb Minor - should be Db-F-Bb or an inversion of that. Also, the 4th beat bass hit is an A.
m11 - same chord thing, but the 4th beat bass note is a C#
m11 b3 - G, not an F.
m12 - 4th beat bass note is a C
m27 1st layer b3.25 - F, not an E
m29 b3 - The bass goes up to a F# here

For the whole m9-16 section, there's a whole different rhythm going on here with swing 8ths on beat 3. I really think it should be included.

Edited

LH stuff:
m25 2nd layer b4 - Should be an A, not a sustained note (forms a 10th)
m27 2nd layer b4 - Should be a C#, not a sustained note (forms 9th)

I didn't include them since it is difficult to play these intervals simultaneously, and arpeggiate them does not sound great either

m32 - Why does the 2nd layer switch octaves? the bass plays in single steps down here.
Why only the grace note in m32? The harmonica makes a similar shape elsewhere through this section.

I forgot to remove them after my experiment on the score. Changed

Double barline at the end of m24 to indicate the section change?

Sure. Please edit this for me, as I can't do this in Notepad

I'm alright with the changes made. Please also edit the mentioned duplet.

• For the title, I'd be tempted to go with what's listed in the in-game soundtrack, since that is the only official source we have to go by. I'll be posting in the other LM3 thread about this after I'm done here...
• Edit: I'd actually be fine with just naming this "Boilerworks", I think it's the most clear. I just want to make sure the title scheme for this and the Mezzanine sheet match.
• The swing playback isn't working for me, is it for you? If not, I can fix it for you.
• Beat 3 of m2, 6, 18, and 22 sound like half notes to me instead of 8th notes.
• Beat 3 of m17 and 21 should have an F under the A (you can also include an E# grace note under the G# if you'd like). These notes also sound long, like quarter notes rather than 8th notes.
• The melody starting at 17 has different articulations from the first time - it's not all normal 8th notes.
• m19 RH beat 3: These 2 8th notes are actually straight instead of swung; you could indicate this with a bracket above and text saying "straight".
• The banjo part starting at m24 beat 4 should be constant 16th notes - I'm not hearing any of those 8th note rhythms like in m24, 26, or 28 for example.

Nice sheet!

- I will keep the title as is, then
- I cannot enable the swing playback since I'm using Finale Notepad. Please fix this
- Note lengths in mm. 1-8 and mm. 17-24 have been adjusted
- Added the F notes in m17 and m21
- I notate the two straight 8th notes as a duplet instead
- Added missing notes in m26, 28
- Edited m24 beat 4 to include both melody (LH) and banjo part (RH)

This track is labeled as "Boilerworks - Track 1" in the game, "Boilerworks: Theme" in this website, and "B2: Boilerworks" or "2B: Boilerworks" in some YouTube videos. I have settled on "Boilerworks" as the sheet name for now, but please let me know if it should be changed.

I have adjusted the sheet based on the suggestions. Thanks for checking the sheet!

[Green Star - Super Mario Galaxy 2]

Green Star - Super Mario Galaxy 2

- Tempo should be 118 BPM instead of 120, unless you strongly prefer to use only tempos corresponding to traditional metronome markings.

Please help me change the tempo to 118 BPM.

- m23 seems like an A major chord, so the top note of the dyad on m23 LH beat 2 would be better off as an A rather than as a G#. (Also, it looks like a lot of the dyads are inverted downwards/have different notes than the ones in the original but are still part of the same chord; I'm assuming these changes were made for playability?)

I'm pretty sure that dyad is C#-E, rather than E-G#. Some dyads are indeed changed for playability, but I might also have misheard a few of them

- In m29-30, were the violin 8th notes on beat 3 omitted from Layer 2 intentionally?

Nope, I didn't heard them before. Notes added

- On m35 RH beat 3, the violin plays an A that you could add under the D# in Layer 2. If you add this, I would also add a G# to m36 LH Layer 1.

I didn't add it because the jumps would be awkward to execute

- I think mp and mf would be more appropriate dynamic markings than mf and f.
- For m5 and m9, you might consider removing the F# in the RH on beat 3 so that it doesn't sound so dissonant.
- For m6 and m10, I would remove the A# in Layer 2 on beat 1 just for simplicity's sake.
- For m7 and m11, I'm hearing RH Layer 2 beat 3 as F#-A instead of E-F#.
- I would either remove or parenthesize the B in m14 RH Layer 2 beat 1, since the LH also plays that B.
- m19 RH beat 3 has a Dn that you could add to Layer 2.
- On m35 LH beat 2, I hear E in the dyad instead of F#.
- It seems a bit unnecessary to have two dynamic markings in the last system, one in each hand, just for the sake of one note (the LH in m37). I think it would be cleanest to simply put one dynamic marking for both hands in m37.

Changed

The Grand Finale (Two Pianos)

- I rather like the "filler" eighth notes in the RH of I in m. 7+. Is there a reason why you took those out?

It is mainly because of the overlapping parts between the hands. I added back most of the notes, except for those overlapping notes

- A lot of notes are flipped when they shouldn't be - for example m. 10/22 I beat 3 RH, m. 26 II beat 3 RH, most of the chords in m. 27-34, the beat 1 dotted quarter notes in m. 35+, etc.
- II RH in m. 15-18 (and the similar part later) would be better written in two layers as the upper and lower voices do independent things
- The overlap is quite awkward in m. 10/22 I, you may want to consider rewriting that differently
- m. 27, 31-34, etc. II RH chords - this is on two pianos so you can feel free to leave the chords as they are even if a note overlaps one in the melody

Fixed

Cackletta, the Fiercest Foe

- I'm pretty sure the title should just be "Cackletta Theme". I don't know if the 3DS version changed track names, but if you're arranging something for the GBA version you should use those track names.

I had indeed used the track name from 3DS version, as I found multiple names for the GBA version of the track and didn't know which one is official. I have now changed the name to "Cackletta Theme"

- I know there's not exactly a lot of room to work with here, but the 4th system (m13-15) is pretty cramped. Maybe adjust the spacing a bit for everything else and move those staves farther apart, or flip the slurs and articulations so they're inside the staff.
- I think the chord in m19 would sound better with G# as the lowest note, so maybe move the B# to the RH (keep it in the same octave).
- If you do the above thing, then add "Edited by Rubikium" to the top.

Adjusted

Showdown with Cackletta!

- Title should be "Final Cackletta", shouldn't it? Similar to above.

Similar to above. Changed the name as mentioned

- Tempo marking should be aligned with the left side of the time signature.
- You can hide the half rests in m6-9 if you'd like, and flip beats 3-4 up.
- I hear that repeated line at m10 RH sounding more like this (applies for m10-17):

Spoiler

[close]

- I hear the bassline start as 2 consecutive 16ths (same note) instead of a single 8th note.
- The last two systems would look a little better if you had 2 measures, then 3, instead of 3 and 2.
- You can space everything on page 2 more apart to account for the extra space on the bottom.

Changed

- The accidentals in this one are weird, but I think you picked the most sensible and easy-to-read ones.

I have changed some of the enharmonic spellings in mm. 1-4 to match mm. 18-19. They might not be easy to read though. I have also add some courtesy accidentals in mm. 10-17.

The opening tempo seems rather .... large. I can fix that at a later point though.
The "composed by" is large and unwieldy but idk how to fix it.
I hear an A# on beat 1 of m14 RH instead of the rest. It's faint, but very much there. Also, the courtesy accidental there should have parentheses around it because it's a courtesy accidental, not one outside the key signature.

That's all I've got. Comment on these and I can make any changes you can't and accept it.

I have only added the missing note in m14. I'm not sure about the composer text myself. Listing the composers in three line might be better, but I didn't implement it. Please help me edit the remaining changes.

Aw, man. I wanted to do this one as soon as I heard it in the game. Sounds great, though, nice job!

Thanks for the praise! The original is very well-composed and I also love this piece since hearing it.

- Rest in m. 4 should be at normal staff height
- I think the mordent in m. 6 would be better below the C# (so it's closer to the notehead)
- RH beat 1 of m. 9 should have an F# under the B
- Tie in m. 18 should bend downwards
- m. 28 shouldn't have a courtesy natural on the Bn (B harmony is already apparent from the beginning of the measure). Similarly, no sharp in m. 40
- I think the A on beat 3.5 of m. 41 would be better written in the left hand

All of above have been changed. The dynamic suggestion has been adapted as well.

Oh, and one last thing for now:It's not required that the pedal for playback has to work perfectly, so we can skip over that part since the sheet music will look as intended. Unless you really want it to, then I or someone else can help out with it.

In that case, no pedals for the playback would be alright.