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Never heard this song before, and it's a pretty good one, ngl. Not a bad arrangement either!

Here's my feedback:
Section 1 (before the guitar riff):
 - For m1-8 RH and m9-40 LH, I hear these notes played twice as often as they're notated (as in 16th notes EEGGBB instead of 8th EGB)
 - m25-40: The pedal markings are in the wrong place (again, it would seem).
 - m25-39: Correct me if I'm wrong, but it seems like you're playing the upper string voice in the LH? While this isn't necessarily a bad thing, you also have it notated in the RH so it might be better to try and notate the bass note (an octave beneath the first note of every other measure from what I can tell) instead. Also, if you do this, you could include the bell that's played occasionally in the LH so it's in the proper octave.
 - m41-48: The staccatos are touching the note and should be moved. The slurs also look kinda funky to me, but I could be wrong there.
 - m41: I hear a B played by a bell on beat 1. It could easily be incorporated into the left hand. (Also, as a point of personal preference, I think it might look a bit better if the upper E was in the RH here, which would allow the bell to be played at the proper octave.)
 - m42 should have Gs instead of Bs (beats 3.5 and 6.5)
 - m49: The bell strikes again here (B below middle C).

By the way, great job incorporating the upper strings and bass notes into m41-48. That works really well!

Section 2
 - m50 I only hear Es
 - I hear the same bassline in m50-53 and m54-57. For m50-53 I would add in the harmonies you have in m54-57, and I would change the last 3 beats of m54-57 to match the last three beats of m50-53.
 - m53 (and 57?) LH beats 5-6: I recommend removing the lower octave from these notes as they have far less power than the preceding octaves in the same measure.
 - m59-66 LH beats 1 and 4: I hear an octave above each of these notes.
 - m67 RH: I hear the first note an octave higher than it is.
 - m68 RH: I hear the same as above - this note should be an octave up.
 - m80 RH: Beat 6 sounds like a C, not a D
 - m107: Is the dynamic in the place you meant it? I know that works if it's only for one hand, but it sounds like the dynamic change should apply to both? I'm not sure on this one, so I'm curious to know your thoughts on it.
 - m115-130: The pedal markings look a bit wonky to me here as well.

Even though I have a lot of notes, I just want to say great job on this arrangement! If you feel like I'm incorrect on any of my points, have any confusion, or just want to explain why you intentionally did what you did in certain sections, just let me know! Once again, great job!

I love that idea, Kricketune! I've been starting to work on a couple songs from those, so that could be fun.

As far as my own... Food theme. I love food, and food is in most games. Songs related to kitchens or any type of food. I think that's nuff said? If I'm wrong, plz correct me so I can fix it

I've been corrected and told that food has already been done. What about a celebration theme? There's always a need for celebration, and most games have at least a couple. This could be anything from a carnival to a victory theme to a celebration dance to a royal banquet/coronation.

I've played piano since I was a kid and I remember always wanting to play songs from games I loved. Classical music? Bleh. Duets? Meh. I always loved the VGM stuff. I was so happy when I found this website years ago. A while down the road, I joined the Discord and became active in the community. Not too terribly long after that, I started getting into arranging because I wanted to help contribute to the site that gave me so many wonderful songs to play. I'm still pretty new at arranging, but this website is what's pressing me to go farther; the joy I get from the songs is what I want to pass on to others. Thank you NSM for helping me to find a hobby that I really enjoy, and may you continue to grow and bring joy to everyone!

Aight. Here's my notes from Xiao's input:
 - Didn't even consider swing before. Makes perfect sense, so that has been changed.
 - Meant to do that. I think I must've changed it in my Musescore file after exporting... That has been fixed.
 - Didn't realize how helpful that would be. Originally I just figured "They've got the same rhythm, they can be the same layer no problem!" That has been adjusted as suggested.
 - I can't take care of the spacing. I sent it out to someone to fix the ottavas, and Notepad broke the spacing once they sent it back. I completely agree, but that's not something I can do on my end. If someone else would fix that for me, that would be lovely.
 - They should be fixed, as mentioned above.
 - I disagree here, especially now that the layers are separated. In this case, the song focuses on the chromatic instead of the chord, as demonstrated by the bassline in this section.
 - That has been done.
 - m12 RH I don't hear a B. I hear a G and an Ab (and possibly an A natural), but that's it. I did, however, adjust the Ab to be a part of the note instead of a grace note, and that sounds right to me.

Also, as a reply for Levi, I quote a YT comment from the song: "I might have lost the cup, but at least the 2nd Grade music class cares about me."

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q8Qobsj1Pic

Looked for this song on vgmdb and I couldn't find the name, so I went with the name that I found on Youtube.

All should be done

All should be done with a couple exceptions:
 - I left the performance note in. True, people expect it to be different, but I personally think it sounds better to have it played at the proper octave and the performance note doesn't really hurt to have, does it?
 - m42 I left the first RH chord in, because it's technically playable. I suppose I can remove it if it really makes a big difference, but I'd rather have it in for those who 1) can play it because they have a big span, 2) can play it because they're really good at shifting, and 3) can't play the full thing but would rather omit the top note than not have it at all.

Also note that I have no clue how to tell chords, but I did my best. All the harmonies I got sounded good to me, but I'm not certain that they're really accurate to the actual song.

Let me know if we missed anything not mentioned here, and hopefully this sheet will get on site soon!

I have 2 very brief notes here as touching the beginning section:
 - m3 has the same problem as m2 where both hands are playing the same E. You could do parentheses around one, but in this case I would recommend just deleting it from the RH and making the LH play it.
 - m4-6 I wouldn't worry too much about the sheet looking cluttered with those tremolos. They don't tend to get in the way, and I think it's a little unclear at first glance if you're supposed to simile the Sfz or the tremolos or both. I would suggest just notating the tremolos for clarity's sake.

This sheet is certainly coming along!

All should be done. Also note that I changed "Performer's Note" to say "Performance Note" since in most cases, I won't be the performer.

Thanks for the feedback, Bloop! Here's my notes on it:
- I removed the 8vbs, but I did include a note on where it should be 8vb for those who want to play it more accurate to the original.
- I rewrote the rhythms. That makes complete sense to me, but I decided to leave the staccatos.
- m2/4 fixed.
- m11 RH edited as suggested
- m13-15 edited as suggested
- m21-29 copied over. I don't know a thing about enharmonic spellings, I just knew what the notes were. Times to use sharps vs flats? No idea.
- Notes "-m30" to "m40": I changed them as suggested. I decided to move the unplayable E down an octave and leave the other one there.
- m41 I hear the G# and I added it in, but I still hear the C# ringing on for several measures, so I left it in. I feel like this likely won't be a problem though, as most people will just choose to eliminate a note or have the capability to play all of them, right?

Thanks again! I'm so excited to see this being shaped into a site-worthy piece! 

The slide has been modified slightly to what I had before changing my mind pre-submission. The problem with the slide is that it goes up and then down, so I wasn't entirely sure the best way to notate it.

Thanks for the help with the left hand, Zeila! There was one part (m32) which I changed slightly from what you had, but I think I did the rest the same. While I'm not certain it sounds completely accurate, at the very least it sounds good, so I'll leave it (especially since I'm bad at hearing it anyways). Yes, I have Audacity, but ngl I have no clue how to use it, so that'll be something I look into for future problems.

As for your notes on the notes I had wrong in various measures, I agreed with most of them. Here's the ones I didn't change:
 - m12 I didn't hear the A, but I did change it to a B
 - m18 I didn't hear the E
 - m20 I had no clue what you were talking about, to be completely honest. If you mean 4.5, which is an F natural (clef change is the beat after), I left it as is, cuz I didn't know what you were hearing there.

Anywho, thanks a lot for the feedback! My piece now feels much more complete (less empty), but is likely still not site-ready. I look forward to more help from you and others in the near future.

Minor update: some triplets (specifically m19) had flags both above and below. That should be fixed now.

Consider it all done, with the exception of the percussion in m23-24. However, there did seem to be a restrike that I included.

Apologies for the extended version. I'll make sure to not do that next time.

I added the RH marking in measure 6 et al, but I left m17/19 as is (because I seem to recall hearing that cross-staffing should be left up to the performer, and that's what this is, yes?)

The key sig has been changed. I thought that's what it was at first, but then there were so many Abs that I second guessed myself...

As another note, I added in a few staccatos where they were needed.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qFbbCdkW5_I