[PC] Undertale - "Spear of Justice" by XiaoMigros

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Submission Information:
Series: Undertale/Deltarune
Game: Undertale
Console: PC
Title: Spear of Justice
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: XiaoMigros

[XiaoMigros]

[Bloop]

Looking pretty good! Just a few tiny things:
-m21: Is there a reason you left out the Gn on beat 5? It's there in the similar m17 too
-m28: Maybe instead of the Ab-Cb dyad in beat 1, you could put Eb-Ab-Cb to finish the melody from m27? Also, in either case, you could put the lower dyads (including beat 1 if you decide to leave it as is) in the bass clef here too, for consistency: it'll be easier for the player to see that this is the same thing as the other 3 times this appears.
-m32: (similar question to m21) Is there a reason you left out the top Fb in the L.H. on beat 1, compared to m31? Also, maybe you could leave out the Bb on beat 6.5, so the L.H. has a bit more time to jump up to m33.

[XiaoMigros]

Also, maybe you could leave out the Bb on beat 6.5, so the L.H. has a bit more time to jump up to m33.

I added parentheses instead

Everything else has been taken care of, thanks for the feedback!

[Bloop]

I added parentheses instead

That works too!

For some reason the pdf seems to be bugged at least on my side, do you have that too?
Also (checking the .musx instead), did you forget to change this part or did you prefer keeping it in treble clef?:

-m28: [...] Also, in either case, you could put the lower dyads (including beat 1 if you decide to leave it as is) in the bass clef here too, for consistency: it'll be easier for the player to see that this is the same thing as the other 3 times this appears.

[XiaoMigros]

oops, should be fixed now

[Bloop]

Nice, I'll approve!

[Latios212]

Very clean sheet and nice attention to playability. I only have a few minor things to mention before accepting.

- I don't think this is strictly necessary, but I think forward repeat bars at the beginning would be good to bookend the repeated section of m. 1-4
- I think the last two bass notes in m. 23 are up an octave?
- Staccatos on the third dyads (eighth note) in the RH of m. 24, similar to the first? For m. 26/28/30 as well
- Thoughts about making the bass 16th notes into 18th notes in m. 33+ similar to 41+? It'd reduce the need for a bunch of 16th rests
- m. 43 RH: that 16th note should have a D on top (if you're concerned about fast restrikes, I'd consider cutting the surrounding ones instead since the missing D is the melody here)
- m. 44 RH: I don't hear the Bb on top of the F towards the end of the measure

[XiaoMigros]

- I think the last two bass notes in m. 23 are up an octave?

Sounds to me like some more instruments come in then, but the bass line I used as reference (triangle wave) keeps the low notes as far as I can tell.

- Staccatos on the third dyads (eighth note) in the RH of m. 24, similar to the first? For m. 26/28/30 as well

I like the more sustained sound without the staccato, helps capture the other instruments better imo

- m. 43 RH: that 16th note should have a D on top (if you're concerned about fast restrikes, I'd consider cutting the surrounding ones instead since the missing D is the melody here)

I am concerned about fast restrikes but to me leaving out the melody note sounded less intrusive than leaving out or not restriking either of the chord ones.

Very clean sheet and nice attention to playability.

A first! Thanks for reviewing

[Latios212]

I like the more sustained sound without the staccato, helps capture the other instruments better imo

Hm, I'm not really sure I follow, since it sounds to me like the strike should sound the same as on beat 1. I won't block on it though

I am concerned about fast restrikes but to me leaving out the melody note sounded less intrusive than leaving out or not restriking either of the chord ones.

I generally disagree with this and think the melody note should be prioritized, even if it's a relatively unimportant one like here. I think it would be fine if you swapped the Bb with the Db on beat 4. I'll leave it up to you, but yeah that's my thought.

You do have some rests showing in m. 19 that aren't supposed to be. Once you get that and reply on the other points I'll accept!

[XiaoMigros]

Hm, I'm not really sure I follow, since it sounds to me like the strike should sound the same as on beat 1. I won't block on it though

Alright, changed

I generally disagree with this and think the melody note should be prioritized, even if it's a relatively unimportant one like here.

Because it's relatively unimportant I feel like it's okay to focus more on chord consistency here, so I left this as is.

You do have some rests showing in m. 19 that aren't supposed to be.

Oops, fixed!

[Latios212]

Alrighty, looks good! Nothing more to add from me, so I shall accept~

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This submission has been accepted by Latios212.

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