[Wii] Super Mario Galaxy - "Heavy Metal Mecha-Bowser" (Replacement) by XiaoMigros

[Zeta]

Submission Information:
Series: Super Mario
Game: Super Mario Galaxy
Console: Wii
Title: Heavy Metal Mecha-Bowser
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: XiaoMigros


Replacement Information:
Links to Existing Sheet: MUS | MIDI | PDF
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)

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[XiaoMigros]

Official Title is "Heavy Metal Mecha-Bowser" [source]

[Bloop]

This looks great! The only thing I can really say about is changing the 32nd grace notes to 16ths, as that's usually what grace note groups of more than two look like. There's a convention somewhere to add beams for every note in a grace note group (up to 4 I think), but then 32nds should only be used for groups of three grace notes. Also, maybe you could look and see if there's places where you could switch to a slightly lower dynamic level? Measure 1-2 seem to be played a bit more intense than m3-4 for example.
Updated the on-site name for you too ^^

[XiaoMigros]

I forgot to write a post after making the updates..

I made the changes you suggested! There wasn't much dynamic difference throughout the track so I only changed m1-4.

[Bloop]

Looks good! Approved!
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[Libera]

This looks fine, if a little bare in places.

Did you consider including the little synth lines at all, like the ones mimicking the patterns in bars 3-4, or the melody in bars 21-24?  Particularly the little movement at on beat 3.5 of these patterns might be nice to include, but I haven't actually tried it out.

Happy to accept either way, the notes and presentation all look solid.

[XiaoMigros]

In an earlier draft I had included some more layers, and, while it did help make the arrangment sound more full, it made everything needlessly complicated, both on paper and on the piano itself. If you want, including the extra synth in m13-20 could work (though the melody couldn't really be sustained).

[Libera]

If you've thought about it before, that's fine with me.

I'll just accept.

[Zeta]

This submission has been accepted by Libera.

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