[SWITCH] Octopath Traveler - "Town Veiled in White" by Static

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Octopath Traveler
Console: Nintendo Switch
Title: Town Veiled in White
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Static

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[Static]

[Libera]

This looks great!  I've just got a few small things to say.

-At bar 9 you could maybe try introducing the strings as a lower layer in the right hand?  That might help to give the same sort of buildup towards 17 as is in the original and helps differentiate that section from the previous eight bars.
-It might just me being not used to seeing it, but should those break marks be there at the end inside the barline?
-Is the dotted voice-leading line necessary when you already have the slur?
-http to https!!! :P

[Static]

This looks great!  I've just got a few small things to say.

-At bar 9 you could maybe try introducing the strings as a lower layer in the right hand?  That might help to give the same sort of buildup towards 17 as is in the original and helps differentiate that section from the previous eight bars.
-It might just me being not used to seeing it, but should those break marks be there at the end inside the barline?
-Is the dotted voice-leading line necessary when you already have the slur?
-http to https!!!

Thanks, I fixed everything. The break marks I think moved as I was moving other stuff around, I just never caught them.

[Libera]

Awesome!  Approved!

[Latios212]

Splendid work, just a couple of very small things:
- Move the rest in m. 28 back up to normal height, it's oddly a notch down unnecessarily
- It's a bit strange that the slur from m. 28-29 flips across the system break. It makes sense since it would look odd written another way, but I wonder if it might be worth leaving the F on the top staff and parenthesizing it instead of the way it is now.

Super glad to see this one going up!

[Static]

I fixed all the things. For m28-29, I moved around the slur markings without adding an extra F.

[Latios212]

Woohoo, sweet!

[Zeta]

This submission has been accepted by Latios212.

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