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Submission Information:
Series: Super Mario
Game: Yoshi's Story
Console: Nintendo 64
Title: On the Beach
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Bloop

[Bloop]

j a z z

[Latios212]

This is nice!
- Would suggest making the left margin a bit larger to accommodate the staff braces
- m. 10/12/18/similar: I'm hearing beat 2 of the LH restrike the E-B dyad instead of playing C? Is this a stylistic choice? (If so, fine by me)
- m. 23-24/27-28: I'd suggest keeping the top layer explicitly written. The way the middle layer has its rests written and notes flipped is a bit odd. Also make sure your LH notes and articulations are flipped correctly.
- m. 30: would suggest substituting D for B in these chords since B is already in the RH melody
- m. 39/41: those last two eighth notes sound like E instead of A

[Bloop]

Fixed!

- m. 10/12/18/similar: I'm hearing beat 2 of the LH restrike the E-B dyad instead of playing C? Is this a stylistic choice? (If so, fine by me)

Yeah, I think the restriked dyad wouldn't get the point across as much, as it's probably intended as a dead note anyway.

[Latios212]

Okay sounds good approved

[Static]

Looks great! The only thing I would change is to make the system spacing on page 3 match page 2. Right now it's a little bit off.

[Latios212]

I got it for ya...

[Static]

Great! I suppose that means I should do this now.

[Zeta]

This submission has been accepted by Static.

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