[MUL] AI: The Somnium Files - "PSYNCIN' IN THE CAPTaiN" by mastersuperfan

Started by Zeta, November 28, 2020, 12:24:06 AM

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Submission Information:

Series: Other
Game: AI: The Somnium Files
Console: Multiplatform
Title: PSYNCIN' IN THE CAPTaiN
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: mastersuperfan

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mastersuperfan


Oh man, this one was a massive pain to write out on piano. It's completely playable with pedal, but the way it's written might not be super clear on how to play it (you have to go back and forth between the two staves with the LH), so any suggestions on improving this one are appreciated.
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

Latios212

Quote from: mastersuperfan on November 28, 2020, 12:27:31 AMOh man, this one was a massive pain to write out on piano. It's completely playable with pedal, but the way it's written might not be super clear on how to play it (you have to go back and forth between the two staves with the LH), so any suggestions on improving this one are appreciated.
It's not immediately obvious what to do, but there are a lot of places where someone might want to play certain notes with the LH and someone else might want to play them with the RH. I think it's pretty okay as is to leave it open like this and up to the performer to decide/notate for themselves.

- The top note of the rolled chord in m. 5 sounds like an E instead
- Did you mean to not put an 8va over m. 42-49? Both RH voices are an octave higher in the original there.
- I would suggest specifying the dynamic directions in m. 42-49 a bit more - it's unclear right now what extent to cresc., or where it maxes out, etc.

Looks pretty good :P
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Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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mastersuperfan

Quote from: Latios212 on January 01, 2021, 12:24:03 PM- The top note of the rolled chord in m. 5 sounds like an E instead
Mmm, I'm not hearing it...

Quote from: Latios212 on January 01, 2021, 12:24:03 PM- Did you mean to not put an 8va over m. 42-49? Both RH voices are an octave higher in the original there.
That was intentional, but now that I look at it again, I think I'll put it back an octave higher.

Quote from: Latios212 on January 01, 2021, 12:24:03 PM- I would suggest specifying the dynamic directions in m. 42-49 a bit more - it's unclear right now what extent to cresc., or where it maxes out, etc.
Done.
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

Latios212

Quote from: Latios212 on January 01, 2021, 12:24:03 PM- The top note of the rolled chord in m. 5 sounds like an E instead
Quote from: mastersuperfan on January 02, 2021, 12:42:06 AMMmm, I'm not hearing it...
Hmm it's a bit tricky to separate voices here but I hear a pretty distinct E there going to the D in the next measure similar to how there's an E in m. 1 and a D in m. 3.

Anyway, that's a small thing, so I'll go ahead and approve this one :P
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Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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Maelstrom

here we go
RH:
-I hear an octave harmony (below) in m2. Since there's ped, I don't see a problem with it.
-I don't hear a harmony on m7 b3.
-m9/17 - first 2/all chords should be rolled
-Same for m14/19 b1
Not going to mention all the rolled chord suggestions because it seems you have intentionally excluded them. I still think it's a good idea for the ones that have a very clear separation to try to replicate the music box feel of the song.

2nd layer:
-m14 b2 - I hear the A an octave lower.
-m20 - I hear b2-2.5 an octave higher. Yeah, they might interfere with the perception of the melody here, but they do that in the original too.
-m27 - I don't hear the E strike on b2.5. No strikes there at all, actually.
-m28 b3 - I hear a A here again, not a B.

LH:
-I hear the E super strong in m5, and would recommend moving the C you have up to the E instead.
-m7 - I hear a F# at the beginning of the rolled chord here, below the G.

mastersuperfan

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AM-I hear an octave harmony (below) in m2. Since there's ped, I don't see a problem with it.
Added.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AM-I don't hear a harmony on m7 b3.
I hear it clear as day.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AM-m14 b2 - I hear the A an octave lower.
I hear this clearly in the octave I have it.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AM-m20 - I hear b2-2.5 an octave higher. Yeah, they might interfere with the perception of the melody here, but they do that in the original too.
The timbre is so different between the two voices in the original that I very much do not hear them interfering with each other. I lowered it an octave because I wanted them to sound like distinct lines like they do in the original.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AM-m27 - I don't hear the E strike on b2.5. No strikes there at all, actually.
Now that I listen again, I actually hear an A there, but I like having an E there better instead since it doesn't repeat the same note twice. I also like the rhythmicity it provides, regardless of whether it is or isn't in the original.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AM-m28 b3 - I hear a A here again, not a B.
Still hearing a B here. The only A I hear is the one that's being held from the start of the measure.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AM-I hear the E super strong in m5, and would recommend moving the C you have up to the E instead.
After listening for a while, I finally heard what you and Latios were referring to. That was not the voice I was trying to transcribe, but I'll make that change anyway since that voice sticks out to both of you.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AM-m7 - I hear a F# at the beginning of the rolled chord here, below the G.
I hear it, but I think the dissonance is much too strong on piano compared to in the original, where the F# is very faint.

Quote from: Maelstrom on January 08, 2021, 11:44:46 AMNot going to mention all the rolled chord suggestions because it seems you have intentionally excluded them. I still think it's a good idea for the ones that have a very clear separation to try to replicate the music box feel of the song.
Sure, I added it in a few places where I thought it was appropriate.

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Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

Maelstrom


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