[N64] Star Fox 64 - "Star Wolf" (Replacement) by Fantastic Ike

[Fantastic Ike]

Awesome, thanks!

[Latios212]

Looking good, glad to have this replacement here's my feedback before we finish up with this one:

Also, this is a very fast speed at which the player has to restrike the notes. m3-6 might be doable with using multiple fingers (i'm personally a bit bad at them), but the octaves  in m7-14 are definitely close to impossible. For these measures I'd recommend something like this:
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I would recommend doing this for m. 3-6 for simplicity and consistency, since you switch over to it in m. 7 anyway.

I hear the highest note at Beat 1 of Bar 23 as D in the original instead of your B.

I'm hearing the whole notes in m. 23-25 as Dn-En-F# (thirds above what you have now). I would suggest writing the whole note RH chord in m. 23 as Dn-F#-Bn-Dn, adding a En on top of m. 24 and inverting the chord in m. 25 upwards once.

- The forte in m. 3, I would recommend moving right, perhaps over beat 1.5, so that it doesn't suggest that the beat 1 chord is softer than the previous section which is in ff.
- Is there a reason the melody is raised an octave in m. 7-14?
- m. 10 - I feel like the bass dips down to F on the second chord, not the third.
- m. 42 beat 1 LH is flipped up instead of down
- m. 35 doesn't have a dynamic at the end of the previous crescendo. (Missing f perhaps?)
- Raise the quarter rest in m. 44 so it isn't so close to the D#
- There's an extra sharp on the D# in beat 2 of m. 44 which shouldn't be there since beat 1 is already sharp. You can try deleting and re-entering it
- The loop ends on ff and goes back to m. 7 which is f the first time. It would be good to either write in a reminder f in m. 7.
- You have extra space at the bottom of pages 2-3; I'd recommend moving the systems down a bit to compensate.

[Fantastic Ike]

I'm hearing the whole notes in m. 23-25 as Dn-En-F# (thirds above what you have now). I would suggest writing the whole note RH chord in m. 23 as Dn-F#-Bn-Dn, adding a En on top of m. 24 and inverting the chord in m. 25 upwards once.

Changed...except m25. Lemme know if I'm in the wrong here, but I feel it's more important to have that bottom D# than the top F# (since you can't reach all of them with one hand). The countermelody in the French horn ends on the low D and it's the loudest part of the song at the moment.

- Is there a reason the melody is raised an octave in m. 7-14?

Good point on this. The timbre of the trumpets fooled me into thinking this was higher up than it was.

Everything else should be changed, no comment on those.

[Latios212]

Changed...except m25. Lemme know if I'm in the wrong here, but I feel it's more important to have that bottom D# than the top F# (since you can't reach all of them with one hand). The countermelody in the French horn ends on the low D and it's the loudest part of the song at the moment.

Gotcha! Yeah that sounds good

Just a few minor follow-ups and we're good to go:

- m. 10 - I feel like the bass dips down to F on the second chord, not the third.

Sorry if this wasn't clear, I'm hearing F on beat 1.75 but Bb in beat 2.5.

- m. 42 beat 1 LH is flipped up instead of down

I think this was missed

- There's an extra sharp on the D# in beat 2 of m. 44 which shouldn't be there since beat 1 is already sharp. You can try deleting and re-entering it

This is back but on beat 2.5 instead should just be present on beat 1

[Fantastic Ike]

- m. 42 beat 1 LH is flipped up instead of down

I think this was missed

Oh, stupid me. I flipped RH instead of LH for some reason.

Okay, I think that should be...everything else?

[Latios212]

That should be it! Good work, I'll accept now

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