Debate topic for next Tuesday: Are cannons truly valid instruments for an orchestra? Or should they be replaced with something safer, like Tesla coils?
Started by LeviR.star, September 29, 2022, 10:50:16 AM
Quote from: Libera on September 29, 2022, 12:41:28 PMThis is too much. You can have the one 3-page sheet or the two short ones, not both. The 3-page sheet is a perfectly good length for a single submission, whereas the other two sheets are short, and so we would allow both of them.I hope that clears it up for you.
Quote from: cacabish on October 02, 2022, 01:13:59 PMm.1-2 (and other analogous places) - I'm not really hearing the fp to mf crescendos you put in there. It all kinda sounds the same dynamic to me. Or if there is a build-up, it's very subtle, certainly not what I would describe as crescendo-ing from p to mf. Still, I do like this kinda dramatic buildup from a playing perspective, though, I'm just not sure if it's fully appropriate/accurate.m.3-4 (and other analogous places) RH - It sounds like the Bb ties into the proceeding A, so, I would maybe add tenuto on the Bb or add a slur from the Bb to the A. I think that would give it this very satisfying hold-and-release with the staccato.m.14 (and other analogous places) RH - I don't think that the G# and A (beat 2) are necessarily both staccato. To me, it sounds like the G# slurs into the A and the A is staccato, though it could also be that both of them are legato leading to the B, not quite sure. Also, it sounds like the beat 1 A has a lift to it, so maybe make it an eighth note or something?m.15-16 (and other analogous places) RH - I would maybe replace the beat 1 D#-G dyad with a Eb-G dyad to keep the major 3rd intervals parallel across the ups-and-down. That said, what you have is quite legible, so I don't know if this necessitates changing.m.18 (and other analogous places) RH - It sounds to me that beats 1 and 1.5 are slurred (as you have it), beats 2 and 2.5 are slurred similarly (with staccato only on beat 2.5), and beat 3 is not staccato at all.
Quote from: Bloop on October 12, 2022, 02:58:06 AM-m3 and 7 (and similar places): With the newly added slurs, maybe you could slur beat 1 to beat 2 here too? They are just as connected as beat 3 to beat 4.-m6: Maybe you could add the C-Bb motion in beat 1.5-2 as an (optional) second layer in the R.H.? It's a bit stretchy but still reachable for me at least.-m11-12, 15-16: You could also write the Gn's here as Fx's (and then the Eb's back to D#'s), since it functions as a #2 to the major third in the chord.-m20-21: The (electric) bass plays the L.H. part an octave below as well, which happens in m1-2 after the repeat too. Up to you if you wanna incorporate that or not ^^-m22: The forte dynamic marking is a bit off-center-m25: I think you can add in the extra two voices underneath beat 1.5 in the R.H.: the player will still only be able to play the E-F legato, but that's enough to make it sound like the whole thing is legato.-m30-37: The same comment from the above applies to this section as well, most of these note can convincingly be played legato. Only m37 is a little bit harder because of the Fn on beat 1.5 and 2.5, you could decide to leave that out.
Quote from: LeviR.star on October 19, 2022, 03:13:52 PMand all those slurs end up making the sheet look awfully cluttered, in my opinion.Quoteawwww i like slurs haha, but I tend to overuse them myself sometimes anyway :p No slurs is alright too!Either way, I'll approve!You cannot view this attachment.
Quoteawwww i like slurs haha, but I tend to overuse them myself sometimes anyway :p No slurs is alright too!Either way, I'll approve!You cannot view this attachment.
Quote from: Static on October 26, 2022, 03:29:40 PMDelightfully devilish, Levi
Quote from: Static on October 26, 2022, 03:29:40 PMm19 RH: It sounds like there's a minor 2nd voice in here (G#-D-G#), but it's probably fine to leave out.m20 LH beat 4.5 should be a Bb in both octavesm33 RH beat 1 is staccato
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