Olimar12345's Aquatic Update Project Sheets

[Olimar12345]

Why not!

[GBA] - Metroid Fusion
Sector 4 (AQA) Underwater Area [MUSX]

[MUL] - Spiritfarer
Last Voyage [MUSX]

[Kricketune54]

Oh neat Spiritfarer!

[Bloop]

Last Voyage
Very neat, Spiritfarer! I haven't played the game myself, but just seeing bits and pieces from my ex playing already got me close to crying, it was a beautiful game.
I don't have much to say about the sheet though, just a few tiny things:
-m25 (and 26): I think I hear an A below the B in the R.H.: it at least sounds like there's more than just an F and a B
-m40: I only hear a dotted 8th E on beat 1 in the R.H., instead two separate E's
-The first page is quite crowded compared to the second page, maybe you could move the bottom system of page 1 to page 2 to get a 5 + 4 system distribution instead of 6 + 3?

[Olimar12345]

Hi Bloop! Thank you for looking it over! Good comments, I have made all of your recommended changes. Thank you!

[Bloop]

Awesome, then I'll approve Last Voyage!

[Bloop]

Double posting because I happened to also take a look at:

Sector 4
-This piece seems mostly be in Bb minor, though that mostly only becomes clear from m16 on. Thoughts on including a key signature there or for the whole piece?
-m12 beat 3.5 to m15: There seems to be a lower Bb here in the strings too. If the R.H. takes the top notes here, the L.H. can play that lower Bb.
-m44: The Bb in the R.H. on beat 2 is an octave higher in the original
-m47: I'm assuming you used the Bbb here in the R.H. for a Gbm chord, but maybe you could write it as an An too, as it's functionally similar to dropping to a leading tone?

[Olimar12345]

Double posting because I happened to also take a look at:

Sector 4
-This piece seems mostly be in Bb minor, though that mostly only becomes clear from m16 on. Thoughts on including a key signature there or for the whole piece?
-m12 beat 3.5 to m15: There seems to be a lower Bb here in the strings too. If the R.H. takes the top notes here, the L.H. can play that lower Bb.
-m44: The Bb in the R.H. on beat 2 is an octave higher in the original
-m47: I'm assuming you used the Bbb here in the R.H. for a Gbm chord, but maybe you could write it as an An too, as it's functionally similar to dropping to a leading tone?

Great suggestions, I've done them all. I added the key signature at 16. The file has been updated!

[Bloop]

Awesome! Maybe a cautionary accidental on the top Bb in m12 beat 3.5 would be nice, just to be sure? Either way I'll approve!

[Olimar12345]

Got it! I added in a couple!

[Kricketune54]

Sector 4

My only comments are visual

For Page 1 the bottom pedal element is quite close to the copyright info. You could reduce the distances between systems to their minimum on this page or play around with it a bit so there's more distance there. The copyright also could be raised to be a little higher (and shows up smaller font visually than other sheets on site for some reason) so it's not outside of the page margin. And for page 2 you could lower the top system a little bit so the slurs aren't so close to the page header elements.

[Olimar12345]

For Page 1 the bottom pedal element is quite close to the copyright info.

That's fair, I've adjusted this so that they aren't as close.

...[the copyright information] shows up smaller font visually than other sheets on site for some reason) so it's not outside of the page margin.

I think you were confused about this in one of my previous submissions as well. I've adjusted the scale of the document, which is why it appears smaller, in case you were curious. I do this sometimes when I feel like the music spacing will benefit.

I would prefer not to move the copyright information higher. I see no practical reason to have a large unused margin space at the bottom of the sheet if its only going to squish everything above it.

And for page 2 you could lower the top system a little bit so the slurs aren't so close to the page header elements.

Honestly, I don't feel like they were close enough to need a mention, but I've scooted them down a smidge to please you. :>

[Kricketune54]

I think you were confused about this in one of my previous submissions as well. I've adjusted the scale of the document, which is why it appears smaller, in case you were curious. I do this sometimes when I feel like the music spacing will benefit.

Oh forgot bout this point or had it mixed up at the very least. I think we usually would like to skew towards keeping some elements consistently sized like the copyright/titles/headers, and by using the resize staff size tool as opposed to changing those aforementioned elements.

But minor stuff so will accept Sector 4

[Latios212]

Last Voyage

I don't think I have anything left to add, this looks great. Accepted!

And that's both sheets, so this thread is now complete