Atcero's Aquatic Update Project Sheets

[Atcero]

Oh man a new arrangement after being gone for months :please:

Depending on how this one goes/if I have time, I may also do a second short one.

I did simplify a bit just do to how many voices are going at the same time in this song, but I do have a 32nd run that can be eliminated/changed if need be.

[MUS]

[Kricketune54]

I did simplify a bit just do to how many voices are going at the same time in this song, but I do have a 32nd run that can be eliminated/changed if need be.

For m16 this run is a bit jumpy to expect a singular hand to pull off, and I don't think it's currently possible to play that first note on beat 2. I think you could play it swapping back and forth between LH and RH though (starting with LH), and removing the current LH part. You could get some cross stave action goin lol if you go that route. Open to seeing what you had in mind as well

Overall looks pretty good!

• Looks like this arrangement is still using engraver font for tempo marking
• counted the 6/8 time sig a little slower at 166 instead of 168
• I would adjust 3rd and 4th systems on page 1 so they are a little higher, that way system 5 (last system)'s repeat doesn't look so tight on the page
• If not doing any sort of cross staff for the 16th runs: You could make the m15 system not as wide, 1.41" should still look good. You could also lower this system a bit from the top of the page as it's a bit high to the page # and title.


• m3 I would remove RH An's in the 2nd layer, it doesn't sound like they are restruck and that would be restriking the held An in the LH
• m4, m13, and m15 it's going to be impossible to hold that 2nd layer throughout, so you could just have a lower octave under the current 1st layer note for the same beat length
• m15 LH accidentals should be consistent (sharps) with previous measures
• m18 and m20 I don't hear a trill in either measure

[Atcero]

Got that all updated, thank ya!

[Kricketune54]

Got that all updated, thank ya!

Sorry I don't see the file updated on Dropbox

[Atcero]

Looks updated to me, not sure why its showing its not. I moved it in and out of dropbox, hopefully that fixed it?

[Kricketune54]

Tempo notehead looks good, I should've specified times new roman for the numerical value though and maestro times for the actual notehead. Did you make the m4 tempo 165 instead of 166 out of personal preference?

• m3 I would remove RH An's in the 2nd layer, it doesn't sound like they are restruck and that would be restriking the held An in the LH

This was referring to beat 4 of layer 2

For m16 this run is a bit jumpy to expect a singular hand to pull off, and I don't think it's currently possible to play that first note on beat 2. I think you could play it swapping back and forth between LH and RH though (starting with LH), and removing the current LH part. You could get some cross stave action goin lol if you go that route. Open to seeing what you had in mind as well

Did you happen to have any thoughts here? I don't think this is a playable figure for the RH to do all those notes, let me know if you need a visual of what I initially described, because otherwise a gliss might be a workable alternative

[Atcero]

Got that all updated, thank you! Let me know if dropbox is being funky with it

[Kricketune54]

Did some Discord discussion (files weren't updating), but this is now approved

[Latios212]

Articulations are showing up funny for me, but that's probably a Finale version thing. We can make sure they're sorted out properly on acceptance + file conversion time. Want to make sure the mordents in m. 17/19 are actually on the C's and not the D's?

Anyway, nice work! Just a few remaining comments.
- I think the intro should be in 3/2 instead of 6/4 (2+2+2 subdivision instead of 3+3)
- Double barline after m. 5 might be good for the section change (since the segno immediately follows)
- It might be good to separate out the lower layer F# in m. 4/13/15 to show that the melody resolves and stays there while the upper voice is new. It would make the upper voice flip up and take significantly more space though, so I guess it's fine if you don't want to
- The 1. and 2. numbers on the repeat endings should be shifted left a bit, to around where beat 1 is.

[Atcero]

I believe I got that all updated, thank ya! I did not do the F however as when I was splitting it it was looking kind of nasty, but if it's wanted I can def revert it.

[Latios212]

I suppose it's fine to keep the F# as-is! Changes look good - I adjusted the articulation positions in my version of Finale and exported the files (as well as poked the positioning of the repeat numbers a tiny bit). This is now accepted, lemme know if there was anything that looks funny in the final files!