Arrangement Project (Paper Mario)

[Sebastian]

Good effort! We'll see what Bloop thinks.....

[Bloop]

I think the left hand B in Measure 3 is an octave lower.

Good catch! That B also seemed to collide with the right hand, so it'd be better off an octave lower. Done.

I would write everything from Measure 17 to the end in the key of Db, including a key change.

Also Done

If you sacrifice octaves and the cluster chords, maybe you could do something like this for that third voice?
Disclaimer: I'm not an experienced pianist so I don't actually know if this makes sense, haha.

It's alright, but I think that makes me sacrifice a bit too much; Like that, the bass notes don't continue at the same rate and the upper voice doesn't sound as twinkly (also, the right hand is playable, but hell-ish). I tried something else though, still sacrificing the chords, but fills up perfectly (I think): [ZIP]

[Sebastian]

Guess we move on
The Master! (Replacement) - mariolegofan - ZIP
Any feedback here?

Original: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V-PFmTf00GQ

[Sebastian]

There.
Fixed a ton of sour stuff including url and wrong notes. Also added a bunch of missing voices.
https://www.dropbox.com/s/ogjs0qvu5t61q7x/Paper%20Mario%20-%20The%20Master%21.zip?dl=0

[JesterMusician]

"Solemnly" isn't exactly how I'd describe the feeling, and it would imply a slow tempo like 60. Perhaps "Maestoso" (or "Majestically" if you want an English term).

I'd add a grace note D to the E in 14.

I'd write the tied note in 15 as a dotted half instead of a half tied into a quarter.

I'm not sure if the F's in the left hand actually change octaves. Could those chords all be just moving fifths?

EDIT: I don't like using slurs to connect two notes of equal pitch because they may look like ties. Rather I'd use tenuto marks.

Perhaps you can include the missing voice in the intro by using the left hand? Just G's, in octaves during 3 and 4, like this:

[Sebastian]

Wow! Nice! You did your homework, JesterMusician
I get right on that stuff

[Bloop]

Try to bit a bit more clear about what notes are and aren't pressed: m. 8 RH for example can't be played physically. I'd change the whole note into a quarter.

Also, move the last two notes in the LH in m. 16 to the first layer. It can't be physically played and it makes the measure look like a 5/4 measure instead of a 4/4 one.

[Sebastian]

Try to bit a bit more clear about what notes are and aren't pressed: m. 8 RH for example can't be played physically. I'd change the whole note into a quarter.

Also, move the last two notes in the LH in m. 16 to the first layer. It can't be physically played and it makes the measure look like a 5/4 measure instead of a 4/4 one.

Pedal

[Bloop]

I think the pedal would sacrifice a bit too much of the staccato/tenuto contrast in those fifths and fourths in the right hand

[Sebastian]

Oh ok
I'll see what I can do with it.

[Sebastian]

Is this better?
https://www.dropbox.com/s/ogjs0qvu5t61q7x/Paper%20Mario%20-%20The%20Master%21.zip?dl=0

[Bloop]

Yeah, just fix what Jester said and it's alright I guess

[Sebastian]

Ok then

You guess

[Sebastian]

"Solemnly" isn't exactly how I'd describe the feeling, and it would imply a slow tempo like 60. Perhaps "Maestoso" (or "Majestically" if you want an English term).

I'd add a grace note D to the E in 14.

I'd write the tied note in 15 as a dotted half instead of a half tied into a quarter.

I'm not sure if the F's in the left hand actually change octaves. Could those chords all be just moving fifths?

EDIT: I don't like using slurs to connect two notes of equal pitch because they may look like ties. Rather I'd use tenuto marks.

Perhaps you can include the missing voice in the intro by using the left hand? Just G's, in octaves during 3 and 4, like this:

Fixed

[Sebastian]

Next song:

Tubba Blubba's Pursuit (Replacement) - mariolegofan - ZIP

Original: https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=iNHugRqToVs