[DELETED] [PC] Undertale - "Bird That Carries You Over A Disproportionately Small Gap" by ThePopStarDude

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Undertale
Console: PC
Title: Bird That Carries You Over A Disproportionately Small Gap
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: ThePopStarDude

[Yug_Guy]

Hey, good to see you submitting Undertale stuff! Just as a general rule, it's always a good idea to post a link to the song that you're submitting. But hey, nbd.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Z51lfE2k7jU

[Olimar12345]

I'm only on my phone, but avoid writing the rhythm in the LH as dotted quarter - dotted quarter - quarter. Write it as a dotted quarter - eighth tied to a quarter - quarter.

[ThePopStarDude]

I see. I'll edit that as soon as I can.

[Bespinben]

Might I suggest that instead of trying to play both the timpani and the (octave-lowered)tubular bells in separate layers in the LH, just play the timpani line in octaves. I say this because some of the power is lost otherwise.

I also suggest trying to determine the appropriate chords for each measure of 5-12, instead of inserting parallel 5ths in the melody that don't exist there.

[ThePopStarDude]

I see. I'll also do that. Thanks!

[ThePopStarDude]

I've updated my .Mus and .Musx files. I decided to have octaves for the main melody, and full chords only with the whole notes.

[Sebastian]

Very good!
Why is the left hand of measures 5-12 in the 2nd layer?

[ThePopStarDude]

Originally I had the tubular bells as whole notes in layer 1, then later removed them and added octaves for the timpani and forgot to move them to layer 1. Shouldn't be a problem, right?

[Sebastian]

Unfortunately, according to the formatting guidelines, you shouldn't have things in other layers for no reason. If you have notepad it will take you a while to transfer it, but I can do it for you if you like. It's only one click for me.

[ThePopStarDude]

Thanks. And it's fine, I have Finale 2014 too. Anyway, I updated the .Musx and .Mus files (again).

[Sebastian]

Looks nice! Let's see what the others think. *Doesn't say Updaters because that would be sassy*

[Dude]

*Doesn't say Updaters because that would be sassy*

Stop.

[FireArrow]

Since MLF has subtly decreed that only updaters may post now, I must put up my facade in order to sneak my opinion in!

(3 sexy green war medals)
- It would be nice to add "Grandiose" flavor text or something for the middle section. It's entirely optional, but there's a lot of contrast between the intro and the main part, so it would be nice to point that out to the performer.
-Try to notate in that stringy voice, the middle section doesn't have enough "umph" to it if you catch my drift.
-Double check those chords and remove the octaves, the melody is just one line with lots of underlining harmonies.
:J

[ThePopStarDude]

I'll do that. I thought I'd add octaves to really bring out the middle part. I don't quite understand what you mean by notating in a stringy voice, but I'll try to add more oomph in there.