[GBA] Hamtaro: Ham-Ham Heartbreak - "Sandy Bay" by Don Valentino

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Hamtaro: Ham-Ham Heartbreak
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Sandy Bay
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Don Valentino

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[Latios212]

[Brassman388]

Could use the downward scale leading into measure 10, the beginning on the repeat.

Bass line in the left hand from measure 10 to 15 could fill that section harmonically.

[JDMEK5]

Could use the downward scale leading into measure 10, the beginning on the repeat.

Maybe also the one in the last measure.

I'm not sure if I believe in having a staccato on a tied note as you do in measure 5. I reckon just a plain ol' rest might be simpler and more conventional.

Also, I don't think I would be against the use of some kind of agitated accent in RH measures 12-13.

Otherwise, very nice.

[Maelstrom]

Could use the downward scale leading into measure 10, the beginning on the repeat.

I disagree. It fits much better in the last measure, and doesn't transition incredibly well into m10. I think one is enough, and it fits best in the last measure.

All other feedback addressed, and then some. Bassline has been rewritten, staccato on tie removed, and everything else.

edit: woops, forgot to mention that I think it's better without the agitated staccato there, JD.

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