Great sheet, but I just have a couple of nit-picky suggestions -
- m6 LH - the flag of the first 8th note (quaver) collides with the sharp sign right after. Just clicking on the notes with the entry tool should fix it
- m10 RH - this may just be me, but the last quarter note (crotchet) doesn't extend into the second portion of the beat, but you could've also done it to not have a single 8th (quaver) rest on the end,or it's just a matter of the soundfont used for that section, and the piano can't "sustain" a note, so the difference of holding it down for an extra fifth of a second doesn't matter, and a human performer will likely drop it before then anyway to get to the next chord, just do whatever you want...
- m14 RH - the 16th note (semiquaver) grouping in beat 2.5 is the only part in the measure beamed down... it might look better beamed up with everything else.
- m15-17 LH - the 8th notes (semiquavers) in the middle are too squished together. Clicking around with the entry tool should also fix this.
- m18 - the first two beats of this measure can benefit from articulations - I'm hearing the C chord in beat 2.5 tenuto (and possibly (see second point) taking up the first half of beat 3) and everything else staccato
- Copyright - Publisher might go before developer, but I'm not exactly sure. "HAL" in HAL Laboratory is completely capitalized. The beams from the bottom system are blocking out some of the copyright, but it's fine if you can't fix that now.