Once again, job well done - great sheet! Bunch of things incoming.
- Raise the slur at the end of measure 2; it's currently too close to the tuplet.
- The notes in the three layers in the middle of m. 16 look a bit mixed up. Were some of them moved between layers to keep things looking nice? And is the hollowed-out notehead for the B intentional?
- Top margins are rather small.
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- I feel like the last two beats of measure 3 naturally want to descend to the high A, which doesn't happen at the beginning of measure 4 like it does in the original. The A comes in later on beat 1.5, but beat 1 feels a bit unresolved. My suggestion - include the A, and throw the E to the left hand. Both hands can roll ninths (in fact, the original even has this chord rolled!) which I don't feel makes it terribly more difficult to play. Playing G-A with the right hand would also put it in a better position to play the subsequent 16th notes.
- About the 15ma in question, I'm generally in favor of reducing ledger lines. However, the way this is written seems a bit odd because it's only for two beats, and it breaks up the phrase at the barline between 31 and 32. If you want to keep the 15ma, I think it would be better written starting on the last note of measure 31. That way there's time to mentally trade off between the 8va and 15ma, and you preserve the contour of those notes.
- Also, for this section in measure 29 through the middle of 32, you could keep the left hand part on the bottom staff to prevent ambiguity as to what the ottava lines apply to, as well as clean up the part visually (see m. 31 beat 4).
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Topic: [MUL] The Legend of Zelda: Breath of the Wild - "Zora's Domain (Day)" by Nacho2420 & Zeila (Read 488 times)