[GB] Kid Icarus: Of Myths and Monsters - "Lose Life" by BrainyLucario

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Submission Information:
Series: Other
Game: Kid Icarus: Of Myths and Monsters
Console: Game Boy
Title: Lose Life
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: BrainyLucario

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[BrainyLucario]

Curse you Toru for not crediting the people who work on your games

[Brassman388]

Haha, I like it.

A few things.

All the notes are short except that dotted quarter in measure 2. Best give all the eighth notes staccatos and reduce the quarter notes into eighth notes.

Secondly, there's harmony going on in measure 2 on that same dotted quarter note. I believe it's a fourth above from just listening to it and humming it, so I could be wrong.

Something small; maybe you don't need to have the indent on the first system since it's the only line of music? I'm looking at it, and I feel it looks lopsided. Additional opinions may be needed.

[BrainyLucario]

Files have been updated with everything but the indention as I don't know how to do that with notepad. If anyone could assist me with that I'd appreciate it.

[Brassman388]

I got you.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/rwu8dse4oxjjkv7/The%20Fight%20Is%20On%21%20edit1.mus?dl=0

[BrainyLucario]

Boom.

[Libera]

I don't have much to say about this other than:
-The tempo mark looks a little close to the stave.  I'd give it some extra space if I were you.
-I'd actually change the dynamic from mezzo-forte to forte to give it that little extra strength!

Otherwise a nice and simple piece with a clean and crisp arrangement!

[BrainyLucario]

Thanks! The suggestions have been added

[Libera]

One final thing, I think that the final note is actually doubled the octave above.  I should have caught that on the first look sorry!

[Brassman388]

I hear an octave above, but an octave below works just as fine.

[BrainyLucario]

I can change it i suppose

[BrainyLucario]

File has been updated

[Libera]

Sorry when I said doubled I mean that that it should look like this:

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(Now that I know an easy way to put pictures on here I shouldn't be as confusing anymore...)

[Brassman388]

You can throw that other F on the top staff, ledger lines and all.

[Libera]

I agree with Brassman actually.  Fix that and I'm happy here.