Instead of using tenuto and staccato in combination, I would put the indication pesante or even molto pesante at the start and write everything in straight eighth notes followed by eighth rests. I believe this better communicates the intended character of the piece, and more clearly indicates that you want complete silence between each of the chord stabs. If you really want to stick with the tenuto + staccato combination, put the mention simile in the third measure and hide all the articulations from then until measure 9.
In measure 8, I hear four sixteenths, just as you've written them. (Well, an octave higher, but you get my point.)
In measure 10, the left hand should be playing an E on the fourth beat. Personally, I'd keep this and the following note an octave higher, since the the texture is at its sparsest here and lowering it can lead to confusion with the bass line (which never goes very low because you always have to play chords), but you don't have to.
The C in measure 11 should be an octave higher. Same goes for the left hand Bb on beat four. (You're still on a D pedal, so D should be your lowest note.)
In measure 13, you could make the slur go from the A in layer one to the E instead of from F to E, in order to avoid collision issues. Also, you could cut the left hand C# if (like me) you're a fan of the raw sound an open seventh gives you, but that's also up to you.
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Topic: [NDS] Pokémon Black Version 2 & Pokémon White Version 2 - "N's Castle" by Trasdegi (Read 2320 times)