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Started by Maelstrom, May 31, 2020, 10:57:43 AM

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Static

Quote from: Maelstrom on December 15, 2020, 02:48:51 PMCatastrophe in BAYeah, that was intentional
Spirit of Avarice
Lunar Clock
All those things make sense to me, so I made some finishing adjustments (page numbers, https, fixing the D.C.) and will now approve all three.

Latios212

Pokey Means Business!
This is... quite something

- "Edited byMaelstrom"
- You've got some space on page 3... you can afford to space things out on page 1 a bit more. The first few systems are a bit unnecessarily tight.
- You might want to spell the last A# in m. 1-4 as Bb. 28-35 as well.
- Some places need staccatos. A few of them include the eighth notes in m. 5, the downbeats in the LH in m. 24+
- m. 7 LH beat 4.25 is a G instead of A
- m. 10 LH should look like m. 14 LH (bad c/p?)
- m. 14 beat 2.5 RH doesn't sound quite right - should it match beat 1?
- The bass of m. 16-19 doesn't sound like droning eighths to me, and neither does the percussion. Maybe adjust the rhythm there a bit?
- Unlike the beginning, the chords in m. 28-35 don't noticeably lift on beat 4.5 - I'd suggest just filling in the measure
- Double barline and courtesy LH natural in m. 44?
- Last dyad in m. 56/60 - should be F#-C# (a whole step higher)?
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Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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Maelstrom

Quote from: Latios212 on December 16, 2020, 08:14:13 PMPokey Means Business!
- m. 14 beat 2.5 RH doesn't sound quite right - should it match beat 1?
regarding m10/14 - The chord in question is undoubtedly a E-C 6th. I have made both look like m10 because inverting it to a 3rd makes it actually playable, because the jump would otherwise be absurd.

Quote- The bass of m. 16-19 doesn't sound like droning eighths to me, and neither does the percussion. Maybe adjust the rhythm there a bit?
I'd like to leave this as is, but with added staccatos. One thing I intentionally did in this song is avoid repeated 16ths where possible.

Everything else fixed.

Latios212

Yep, both of those are fine. Everything else looks good to me as well, so approved!
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Latios212

Spirit of Avarice
- Quotation marks around page 2 title
- Would recommend not showing the naturals in the key change
- There's an extra staccato on the first RH note in m. 6/8/10
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Latios212

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mastersuperfan

Lunar Clock ~ Luna Dial - Touhou 6

- I'm hearing something very different for m1-4:

- On m6 RH beat 2.5, I can see where the Eb comes from, but to me it seems less like a part of the line itself and more like a stray percussion hit that isn't strongly pitched.
- m9-12 RH beat 3.5 should be C instead of G.
- Shouldn't beat 1 of m32/36/40 RH be raised an octave?
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

mastersuperfan

Catastrophe in Bhava-Agra ~ Wonderful Heaven - Touhou 10.5
- In m1-8, why do alternating measures have different LH rhythms? The LH pattern sounds like it should be the same in all measures.
- I think m10 would be easier to read if it was all under the 8va.
- Change dynamic to mf at m11? More dynamics in general would be nice.
- In m15/19/23/etc., I would change the LH dyad on beat 2.5 to be like the other dyads (F-A instead of A-D). The high D sticks out a little too much there and I don't hear it in the original.
- m13/17/etc. LH beat 4 has a sixteenth note rhythm instead of just eighth notes.
- Rhythm in m33 RH is written wrong
- I think m46-47b should be written under the 8va as well.
- This might just be a v26 import thing, but for me, the pedal markings in m42-44 look way too close to the notes.
- The LH chords in m48-63 are really muddy. Maybe remove one note from each? It's true that the chords in the original also sound thick, but on piano I feel like these are overpowering.
- In m54 RH, sounds to me like the notes under the B's should both be F#'s instead of G and D.
- In m57 RH, the Layer 2 note on beat 1 sounds like it should be C instead of F.
- In 63 RH, the C and Bn on beats 4-4.25 should be lowered an octave.
- I don't hear those sixteenth notes at the end of m68 RH. Just sounds like a G eighth note on beat 4.5.
- In m75 RH, beat 2.5 sounds like it should be tied to beat 3.
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

Maelstrom

Lunar Clock
discussed for far too long on discord and updated

Catastrophe
Discussed over discord again and updated

mastersuperfan

Quote from: Maelstrom on December 21, 2020, 04:01:52 PMLunar Clock
discussed for far too long on discord and updated

Catastrophe
Discussed over discord again and updated

both accepted
Quote from: NocturneOfShadow on February 11, 2016, 03:00:36 PMthere's also a huge difference in quality between 2000 songs and 2010 songs
Quote from: Latios212 on February 11, 2016, 03:29:24 PMThe difference between 2000 songs and 2010 songs is 10 songs.

Static

Pokey Means Business
Here are my thoughts on the accidentals:
  • Keep m37-41 the same; the bassline looks weird but it almost implies chords similar to the previous measures, so I think it's fine to leave it as is
  • m47 beat 3 and similar places (places with B and Eb) should be B and D# instead
  • It'd probably be best to spell the last chord in m56/60 with as many common tones as possible, so Gb-Eb-Bb
  • You could put m6-27 in D minor since that's what it is there, up to you I guess.
Otherwise, the sheet looks good

Maelstrom

discussed over discord, but didn't change m47 b3 because that's a Bb in the chord, not a B. If it was a B, I'd agree with you.

File updated

Static

Quote from: Maelstrom on February 27, 2021, 12:14:56 PMdiscussed over discord, but didn't change m47 b3 because that's a Bb in the chord, not a B. If it was a B, I'd agree with you.
i can't read sheet music apparently

Accepted