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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #30 on: December 16, 2020, 06:56:36 AM »

Catastrophe in BAYeah, that was intentional
Spirit of Avarice
Lunar Clock
All those things make sense to me, so I made some finishing adjustments (page numbers, https, fixing the D.C.) and will now approve all three.

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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #31 on: December 17, 2020, 05:14:13 AM »

Pokey Means Business!
This is... quite something

- "Edited byMaelstrom"
- You've got some space on page 3... you can afford to space things out on page 1 a bit more. The first few systems are a bit unnecessarily tight.
- You might want to spell the last A# in m. 1-4 as Bb. 28-35 as well.
- Some places need staccatos. A few of them include the eighth notes in m. 5, the downbeats in the LH in m. 24+
- m. 7 LH beat 4.25 is a G instead of A
- m. 10 LH should look like m. 14 LH (bad c/p?)
- m. 14 beat 2.5 RH doesn't sound quite right - should it match beat 1?
- The bass of m. 16-19 doesn't sound like droning eighths to me, and neither does the percussion. Maybe adjust the rhythm there a bit?
- Unlike the beginning, the chords in m. 28-35 don't noticeably lift on beat 4.5 - I'd suggest just filling in the measure
- Double barline and courtesy LH natural in m. 44?
- Last dyad in m. 56/60 - should be F#-C# (a whole step higher)?
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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #32 on: December 19, 2020, 10:21:40 PM »

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- m. 14 beat 2.5 RH doesn't sound quite right - should it match beat 1?
regarding m10/14 - The chord in question is undoubtedly a E-C 6th. I have made both look like m10 because inverting it to a 3rd makes it actually playable, because the jump would otherwise be absurd.

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- The bass of m. 16-19 doesn't sound like droning eighths to me, and neither does the percussion. Maybe adjust the rhythm there a bit?
I'd like to leave this as is, but with added staccatos. One thing I intentionally did in this song is avoid repeated 16ths where possible.

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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #33 on: December 19, 2020, 10:36:16 PM »

Yep, both of those are fine. Everything else looks good to me as well, so approved!
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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #34 on: December 20, 2020, 01:28:50 AM »

Spirit of Avarice
- Quotation marks around page 2 title
- Would recommend not showing the naturals in the key change
- There's an extra staccato on the first RH note in m. 6/8/10
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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #35 on: December 20, 2020, 01:35:00 AM »

Fixed

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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #36 on: December 20, 2020, 02:49:47 AM »

Great, accepted
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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #37 on: December 21, 2020, 10:07:13 AM »

Lunar Clock ~ Luna Dial - Touhou 6

- I'm hearing something very different for m1-4:

- On m6 RH beat 2.5, I can see where the Eb comes from, but to me it seems less like a part of the line itself and more like a stray percussion hit that isn't strongly pitched.
- m9-12 RH beat 3.5 should be C instead of G.
- Shouldn't beat 1 of m32/36/40 RH be raised an octave?
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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #38 on: December 21, 2020, 07:01:59 PM »

Catastrophe in Bhava-Agra ~ Wonderful Heaven - Touhou 10.5
- In m1-8, why do alternating measures have different LH rhythms? The LH pattern sounds like it should be the same in all measures.
- I think m10 would be easier to read if it was all under the 8va.
- Change dynamic to mf at m11? More dynamics in general would be nice.
- In m15/19/23/etc., I would change the LH dyad on beat 2.5 to be like the other dyads (F-A instead of A-D). The high D sticks out a little too much there and I don't hear it in the original.
- m13/17/etc. LH beat 4 has a sixteenth note rhythm instead of just eighth notes.
- Rhythm in m33 RH is written wrong
- I think m46-47b should be written under the 8va as well.
- This might just be a v26 import thing, but for me, the pedal markings in m42-44 look way too close to the notes.
- The LH chords in m48-63 are really muddy. Maybe remove one note from each? It's true that the chords in the original also sound thick, but on piano I feel like these are overpowering.
- In m54 RH, sounds to me like the notes under the B's should both be F#'s instead of G and D.
- In m57 RH, the Layer 2 note on beat 1 sounds like it should be C instead of F.
- In 63 RH, the C and Bn on beats 4-4.25 should be lowered an octave.
- I don't hear those sixteenth notes at the end of m68 RH. Just sounds like a G eighth note on beat 4.5.
- In m75 RH, beat 2.5 sounds like it should be tied to beat 3.
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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #39 on: December 22, 2020, 01:01:52 AM »

Lunar Clock
discussed for far too long on discord and updated

Catastrophe
Discussed over discord again and updated

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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #40 on: December 22, 2020, 02:54:30 AM »

Lunar Clock
discussed for far too long on discord and updated

Catastrophe
Discussed over discord again and updated

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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #41 on: February 22, 2021, 02:45:19 AM »

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Here are my thoughts on the accidentals:
  • Keep m37-41 the same; the bassline looks weird but it almost implies chords similar to the previous measures, so I think it's fine to leave it as is
  • m47 beat 3 and similar places (places with B and Eb) should be B and D# instead
  • It'd probably be best to spell the last chord in m56/60 with as many common tones as possible, so Gb-Eb-Bb
  • You could put m6-27 in D minor since that's what it is there, up to you I guess.
Otherwise, the sheet looks good

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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #42 on: February 27, 2021, 09:14:56 PM »

discussed over discord, but didn't change m47 b3 because that's a Bb in the chord, not a B. If it was a B, I'd agree with you.

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Re: Maelstrom's Replacements
« Reply #43 on: February 27, 2021, 09:26:07 PM »

discussed over discord, but didn't change m47 b3 because that's a Bb in the chord, not a B. If it was a B, I'd agree with you.
i can't read sheet music apparently

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