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Which one of these series would you like to see more songs from?

Baten Kaitos
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Kid Icarus Uprising
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Xenoblade Chronicles
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Paper Mario: Origami King
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Bravely Default
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Total Members Voted: 5

Voting closes: November 16, 2020, 04:00:52 PM


Author Topic: legoenthusiast’s Arrangements - [SWITCH] PM: OK - Toad’s BBQ Foodeatery  (Read 151 times)

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Kid Icarus Uprising
Solo Menu - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6274799
Boss Battle 1 - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6167185

Kirby
Air Ride
Frozen Hillside - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6178450

Return to Dreamland
Through the Forest - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6344058

Star Allies
Inner Sanctum - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6215984

Fire Emblem: Three Houses
Seeking New Heights - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6337299

Mario & Luigi: Partners in Time
File Select - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6279102
Title Theme - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6277840

Mario & Luigi: Bowser’s Inside Story
[new] Fawful is There (2 pianos) - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6405110

Octopath Traveler
The Cliftlands - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6287652

Paper Mario: Origami King
Folded Soldier’s First Appearance - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6307813
Toad Town in Trouble - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6318169
Toad’s BBQ Foodeatery - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6411802

Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Explorers of Sky
Job Clear! - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6074172
Title Theme - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6308911

Super Smash Bros. Ultimate
The Valedictory Elegy Remix - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6294949

The Legend of Zelda: Spirit Tracks
Aboda Village - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6107943
Castle Town - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6183558
Game Over - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6093761
Story - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6090165
The Final Exam - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6155006

Xenoblade Chronicles
A Friend on My Mind - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6276404
Eryth Sea(currently undergoing revision) - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6101967
Everyday Life - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6197944
Face - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6048180
Rage, Darkness of the Heart - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6027441
Riki’s Kindness - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6282020

Definitive Edition
[new] Bionis’ Right Shoulder (Night) - https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6397499

I am currently working on
- Picnic Road(Origami King)
- Autumn Mountain(Origami King)
- The Fascinating Flower Country(Bravely Default)
- Thunder Cloud Temple(Kid Icarus Uprising)
- True Mirror(Baten Kaitos)
- The Valedictory Elegy(Baten Kaitos)
- Red & Black(Bayonetta)
- Gran Dell(Xenoblade DE)
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Re: legoenthusiast’s Arrangements - [new] Bionis’ Right Shoulder (Night)
« Reply #1 on: October 21, 2020, 03:45:04 PM »

Fawful is There (2 pianos) - Mario & Luigi: Bowser’s Inside Story

Original song:

My arrangement: https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6405110
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Some spontaneous, non-all-encompassing feedback:
Through the Forest:
The bassline in m3-10 isn't really like you wrote it at all. The bass guitar hits the same notes every time in m3 and similar, and does some really interesting stuff in m9-10 that you just left out.
LH chords at the end of m6 and m22 aren't playable at all.
I'm not sure tremeloes are the best approximation for what the LH is doing in m11-17...

Castle Town:
Those repeated LH chords on b2 of every measure aren't that playable. I suggest, for, say, m2, removing the C in the chord on beat 2 and 3 and having the chord on b2.5 just be the C. This would give you the feel of the original without any repeated notes.

Face:
8vbs are your friends. please use them.
There's more stuff in between m19 and 26 than you have written.
The major issue here is note beaming. Check out this thread and tell me if you need a longer explanation:
https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?topic=10492.0
Also, please tie the half notes to whole notes in the empty measures. There is never a moment of silence in the original, so I don't know why you would have one here.
Maybe incorporate more of the drums into the LH? It would make it more interesting to play.

Rage, Darkness of the Heart:
for the love of notation, please please space your measures out further. Everything is so crammed that it ruins the spacing. Take m18, for example. Since there's no 2nd layer rests, it's impossible to tell what beat that quarter note is actually on since it's spaced the same as the half notes in m14.
I think fff is a bit excessive for this. mf or mp would be better imo.
I'm positive the harmonies are not just 3rds all the way through the first page. There's much more going on here.
Pretty sure there's always something going on in the LH, not sure why there's a few measures of rests.
When things speed up, the RH is not just octaves here. There's more going on here (and not just 3rds).

Daily Life also desperately needs proper note beaming as well.

edit: remove the spaces around the = in your signature to make the links function properly
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“LH chords at the end of m6 and m22 aren't playable at all.”
It’s supposed to be played by both hands (r.h. playing the top chord, l.h. playing the bottom notes).
I just left it out ‘cause it’s natural for me when I’m playing to cover the notes that my right hand can’t cover with my left hand and vice versa. I wasn’t sure how I should label that those notes should be played with the right hand.

“The bassline in m3-10 isn't really like you wrote it at all. The bass guitar hits the same notes every time in m3 and similar, and does some really interesting stuff in m9-10 that you just left out.”
I have to listen to it again, but I usually have a hard time picking out notes with my ears.

“I'm not sure tremeloes are the best approximation for what the LH is doing in m11-17...”
I’m honestly not to sure what’s going on there.

“Those repeated LH chords on b2 of every measure aren't that playable. I suggest, for, say, m2, removing the C in the chord on beat 2 and 3 and having the chord on b2.5 just be the C. This would give you the feel of the original without any repeated notes.”
I don’t find it too difficult, but if that would be a problem when I submit it to the site then I will make it easier. I have been known to have dyslexia from time to time, so correct me if I’m wrong, but there is no C in m.2 on beats 2 & 3. Unless you’re not counting the intro measure, in which case, I’d say it’s a good idea, since I do find that my hand tires quickly while playing the current left hand.

“8vbs are your friends. please use them.
There's more stuff in between m19 and 26 than you have written.
The major issue here is note beaming. Check out this thread and tell me if you need a longer explanation:
https://www.ninsheetmusic.org/forum/index.php?topic=10492.0
Also, please tie the half notes to whole notes in the empty measures. There is never a moment of silence in the original, so I don't know why you would have one here.
Maybe incorporate more of the drums into the LH? It would make it more interesting to play.”

I was planning on fixing this, and actually using and 8vb bass clef instead. Every other problem is due to my inexperience as a music sheet writer and arranger, I will be fixing it.

“for the love of notation, please please space your measures out further. Everything is so crammed that it ruins the spacing. Take m18, for example. Since there's no 2nd layer rests, it's impossible to tell what beat that quarter note is actually on since it's spaced the same as the half notes in m14.”
Yeah, this is also due to inexperience with Musescore and writing sheet music.

“I think fff is a bit excessive for this. mf or mp would be better imo.”
Uh, that would be due to me thinking it was extra loud since I had the volume up while arranging it.

“I'm positive the harmonies are not just 3rds all the way through the first page. There's much more going on here. Pretty sure there's always something going on in the LH, not sure why there's a few measures of rests. When things speed up, the RH is not just octaves here. There's more going on here (and not just 3rds).”
Again, this is all due to my inexperience, as this was literally my first score. I will be fixing it when I get around to it.

“Daily Life also desperately needs proper note beaming as well.”
Yeah, I only found out about proper beaming recently, I will fix this too. (I’m assuming you’re talking about Everyday Life)

Thank you for the advice :)



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Traditionally, pickup measures aren't counted in the measure number count.

So you know, the 8vb bass clef is a vocal clef, not a piano clef. Another option is to put a custom dynamic/text that says "play LH 8vb" and have a hidden 8vb mark.

Looks like the rest doesn't need clarification, glad you found it helpful. Hope to see you submit something to the site so we could go over these in more depth.

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Ah, okay

I think a hidden 8vb and the dynamic text it the perfect idea, since I didn’t know about that clef not being for piano, thank you!

I will be submitting once I get all my files in order, and convert them into the .mus, .midi, and .pdf files.

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Sounds good! As always, if you need help formatting, just ask.

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My arrangement: https://musescore.com/user/12676221/scores/6411802

I’m going to submit this once I’ve finished converting it to the proper files and set up Dropbox.
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