[SW] Xenoblade Chronicles 2 - "One Last You" by JZ

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Submission Information:
Series: Xeno
Game: Xenoblade Chronicles 2
Console: Nintendo Switch
Title: One Last You
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: JZ

[MomoQca]

I struggled a bit on the placement of the lyrics as they tended to clash with many things. It is not perfect.

As always, feedback is appreciated. Have a great day!

[Latios212]

I appreciate the effort to get a sheet for this song on site (Side note, your lead sheets for the Xeno songs have been fun for me to play around with, so thanks!)

Just skimming for now, but one thing I would like to suggest. Notating pitch bends makes sense for writing vocal lines, but not as much for piano. You can't smoothly pitch bend on piano, so I feel like the extra note strikes feel intrusive rather than helpful, as if you're adding more syllables artificially. The melody line on piano feels more faithful to me without the pitch bends in it, more similar to how the other piano arrangement does it. What do you think?

also I'm confused why Jen Bird has a (s) at the end

[Kricketune54]

Bump for arranger, it seems Latios has left you some comments here and was looking for your thoughts

[MomoQca]

Hi! Sorry for the wait. I just wanted to prioritize my other sheet for the update. Now that it is on-site, I can shift my focus back to this one.

That being said, I'm currently out of town. I intend to get back to this as soon as I can.

[MomoQca]

Sorry, this took so long!

Files have been updated per Latios' comments. (Btw, I'm glad you like the lead sheets! Still have a few more songs to add to the catalogue haha)

General changes to the sheet:
-Measure system-wise, the previous file felt cluttered. Decreased to 2 measures per system (not all of them)
-Revamped most of the LH part
-Added guitar voice (m2-4), piano chords (m7, 9, 10, 13, etc.), strings (m27-29, 68, 69, etc.)
-Guitar solo (m60-67) has been tweaked a bit to be more pianistic

[Kricketune54]

Okay have some comments to add here! There's a lot to eventually go through, so I'm going to start kind of small for now. The systems look good at a glance two measures per system overall seems to work well. Have not had a chance to look at rest of additions you made

• m1 LH I hear the low Dn held up to beat 2.5 - so on beat 2.75 I hear an En for 16th note length.
• Hearing same length for the F# on beat 3.0, with a Dn on beat 4.75.
• m1 RH I think the An on 3.0 would look a little better in the lower staff - the progression from Dn to An looks weird atm from 2.75 to 3.0. Maybe do some cross stave between 4.0 and 4.5? Have 4.0 in the lower staff, and 4.5 in the upper one, lmk if you need an image for this.
• m2 LH I hear the G held for a half note and an 8th note length. But beat 3.5 is a Dn, followed by a Bb and F# on 4.0 and 4.5
• In m3 and m4 LH, hearing similar rhythms... I would relisten to these as it seems like you might not have heard some notes that are present in the bass part
• m14 and m82 my experience with lyrical arrangements is a little low, but general rule to follow, there should not be words colliding within noteheads, stems, or cresc's. I would suggest  moving the lyrics down a bit in the m13-15 system to avoid the note stem in m14, and widening m82 a little for the cresc.

[MomoQca]

Hi! Thanks for taking the time to tackle this long and complex song. Everything you've pointed out has been addressed.

[Kricketune54]

Sorry for taking a while myself to return to this, but here's some more feedback

• On the whole I think some of the measure systems could be a little less wide. Main goal being that there's not a single system on the final page. I would play around a bit but maybe there's a page or two you could manage 6 measure systems.
• Given all the hidden pedal marks is there a reason there's no con pedale direction?

Upper Staff
• m4 1st voice 3.0 not hearing a Bb in this chord... Bb makes this minor sounding, and the original this is major. I think En (above current C#) works better (note this chord is different than m29)
• m6 This is both hands, but this rhythmically sounds more prominent to me

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• m7 1.75 Not hearing a note/"The", sounds like "Final day" lyric on beat two is the start just like m5
• m13 4.75 lyric is "You" not "I"
• m29 3.0 the roll should be a bit left of the flat accidental so they don't overlap. You could make an adjustment and add more space to the beginning of this measure so there's more space to move around.

Lower Staff
• m3 2.5 An
• m3 4.5-4.75 technically it's more a gliss/slide from the En, you could do two 16th grace notes, Gn and G# leading to m4's An.
• m5 3.0 hearing this as F#
• m10 4.0 hearing Gn (up an octave from 3.0) and 4.5 Dn
• m39-41 Both voices should be flipped the opposite directions that they currently are.

[MomoQca]

*snip*

Posted in error. I'll edit this once I update the files.

[MomoQca]

• On the whole I think some of the measure systems could be a little less wide. Main goal being that there's not a single system on the final page. I would play around a bit but maybe there's a page or two you could manage 6 measure systems.

I was able to cut it down to 5 systems per page (page 2 and onwards).

• Given all the hidden pedal marks is there a reason there's no con pedale direction?

No reason in particular. I keep forgetting to include con pedale lol

• m7 1.75 Not hearing a note/"The", sounds like "Final day" lyric on beat two is the start just like m5
• m13 4.75 lyric is "You" not "I"

The lyrics has been taken from the official OST booklet (which I have). This site has the lyrics taken from the booklet. For the first point, the "The" in <The final day has come to an end> has been eliminated. The singer doesn't appear to pronounce the word despite it being in the official lyrics. However for the second point, I left the "I" in <I will trace back all the memories>. It sounds like it could go either way, but I personally prefer to use the official one.

• m3 4.5-4.75 technically it's more a gliss/slide from the En, you could do two 16th grace notes, Gn and G# leading to m4's An.

I think I fixed this. I messaged you via Discord. If needed, I will adjust accordingly.

Everything else has been addressed.

[Kricketune54]

I was able to cut it down to 5 systems per page (page 2 and onwards).
No reason in particular. I keep forgetting to include con pedale lol

These look good

The lyrics has been taken from the official OST booklet (which I have). This site has the lyrics taken from the booklet. For the first point, the "The" in <The final day has come to an end> has been eliminated. The singer doesn't appear to pronounce the word despite it being in the official lyrics. However for the second point, I left the "I" in <I will trace back all the memories>. It sounds like it could go either way, but I personally prefer to use the official one.

Thank you for this clarification! Hmm... I would think go by the official lyrics, but if the artist doesn't say them in the recording... I am good with you leaving the words as is. I guess one thing you could do if you wanted, is to put parentheses around each word that is not spoken in the actual track.

I think I fixed this. I messaged you via Discord. If needed, I will adjust accordingly.

Yep as discussed on Discord this looks good


• m2 RH technically if there's a hidden rest, the first voice wouldn't be flipped won teh way it currently is. Also applies to m4
• admittedly I have to do a bit of a deeper look, but why did you choose to bump the sung melody up an octave?

[MomoQca]

Thank you for this clarification! Hmm... I would think go by the official lyrics, but if the artist doesn't say them in the recording... I am good with you leaving the words as is. I guess one thing you could do if you wanted, is to put parentheses around each word that is not spoken in the actual track.

I'm good either way, though I may ask other updaters for their thoughts.

I should mention that the singer Jen Bird confirmed a slight modification to a line per this interview with Chuggaaconroy. The official lyric line is as follows:

<Can you please spare me some time with the one man I loved?>

She says "a" instead of "some". For this instance, I went with her choice of word instead of the official lyric due to her acknowledgement.

• m2 RH technically if there's a hidden rest, the first voice wouldn't be flipped won teh way it currently is. Also applies to m4

Done.

• admittedly I have to do a bit of a deeper look, but why did you choose to bump the sung melody up an octave?

To utilize the full range of the piano, I put the vocals in the upper range and the piano part in the lower range. I wanted the vocal melody to stand out more.

Thank you for taking the time to review my sheet!

[goldenscruff]

m60-67 There's some points where you could be more faithful to the guitar, and add in the vocals. These are mostly just suggestions
  m63 add the sextuplet guitar (E D |C# B A# B C# D | A B B B )
  m64 Drop the octaves in the RH so that you can have vocal line B -> A -> D (LH b3.5)
  m66 Add Vocals D (LH b2.0) E (LH b2.5) F# (RH b3.0) A (RH.4.0) D (RH b4.75)
  m67 b3 You can add a grace An before the Bn in the RH
  m67 b4 Change LH to a sextuplet pattern to match the drums

m80 I think you could change the LH to have a low G on b 1.0, 1.75 and 2.5 to match the pulse better.

m81 The RH feels a bit weird, I would suggest putting it up an octave and having m82 b1 being a (broken) 10th

m82 RH I'm pretty sure the vocals is a Bn not An

[MomoQca]

m81 The RH feels a bit weird, I would suggest putting it up an octave and having m82 b1 being a (broken) 10th

I raised the vocal layer an octave higher and added an arpeggio chord. Is this what you had in mind?

Everything else has been addressed. I did however have some difficulty determining the stem directions for the guitar and vocal layers, particularly in the guitar solo section (m.60-67). Let me know your thoughts.

Thank you for taking the time to provide some feedback!